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She Comes 'Round Here

There's no real story behind this song. Teaching school online has buried me, so I worked on this one in spits and fits (my own malapropped idiom). For five minutes here and five minutes there, I just kept playing a D and Em7 with a G and F#m thrown in for good measure eek until some lyrics and melody materialized and took it from there. Lyrically, there's not a bloody rhyme to be found.

For the band, I used the NEBULA style and added the banjo. I snipped and snapped two different Pedal Steel tracks to get what I wanted.

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RealBass 1592
RealDrums-BluesRockSlow
RealPiano 3101
RealGuitar 3160
RealStrings 2542
Banjo 1035



She comes ‘round here
On the moonless nights
In the melting starshine
Holds me in the dark

She comes ‘round here
She’s my whisper dancer
With her windswept movements
Glides me through the air

I can turn a phrase
But I can’t turn around
To find my way back to her

She comes ‘round here
With her black skirt swirling
In a blinding circle
Leads me out of sight

I can turn a phrase
But I can’t turn around
To find my way back to her

I go through my mind
To places we have gone
I give up my ghosts
And take the last ride home

She comes ‘round here
Velvet light and shadow
Virtuosic beauty
Takes her final bow

I can turn a phrase
But I can’t turn around
To find my way back to her

She comes ‘round here

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Beautiful.

The BAND is stunning! Great combination of RTs to create a gorgeous musical field. Great work.

Nice lyric. The lack of rhymes isn't really even noticed. The melody and the way you sing the lyric "makes it work". Well sung. And good harmonies. The melody moves in unexpected ways that sit on the ear nicely.

I very much enjoyed the listen.

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Hi Ezekiel's Storm,

Wow, really cool song. I thought I heard David Bowie a couple of times singing. Definitely twinges of his voice anyway. I'd imagine, this is what it would sound like if he did a folk song early in his career. Nice original use of the NEBULA style. Really enjoyable listen even in spite of rhymes. Who knows, it might rhyme in some other language.

Thanks for posting

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Interesting experiment, I don't think I would have noticed the lack of rhymes if you hadn't pointed it out. Really nice song sung with passion, I liked it a lot and listened several times.


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I really like this. No rhymes? At first I thought this won't work. But it does on all levels. Beautifully conceived and performed. A great idea kinda like free form poetry. Great work, Tom

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Ditto what has been said...I'd add that when your song is at this slower tempo the rhyming thing is less noticeable...probably at a quicker tempo the listener's mind would be anxious to latch onto the coming rhyme, but, as others have said, your "story" and the delivery is so engaging...loved the simple chord change motif. As always, your vocal is spot-on and fits perfectly. Enjoyed it alot!

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Hi Ezekiel.
"I can turn a phrase" you most certainly can do that.
"Virtuosic beauty,She’s my whisper dancer,her windswept movements,her black skirt swirling"
Such evocative , poetic imagery. So now I'm curious, who is this mystery woman?
Excellent narrative songs such as this always influence and ignite my imagination and i enjoyed the song immensely.
I agree with Bawb about the touch of Bowie in your voice.

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This, for me, is your best vocal performance.
The band is cool but your melody & performance stand out.


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Hello Ezekiel's Storm,

You've chosen the tempo for this song. Because he allowed you to model your voice on the important words raised in your lyrics. The Banjo has its place even if it is limited to following the chords. The arrangement is sober but pleasant. It helped bring out the vocal and it is very so. Good job.

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Wow - I really enjoyed this one. Love the slow pace, and how all the element play into one another. Emotional lyrics, and your voice delivers them beautiful. Love the rich, lush instrumentation as well.

Thanks for sharing smile


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Spits and fits. Yeah, it fits a lot of situations. Adding that banjo was another creative connection. The whole tune is perfectly put together, and wonderfully sung, Ezekiel. Rhymes are overrated when the story is told with sincerity.


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Liked everything about this.

As others have mentioned, I wouldn't have noticed the lack of rhymes if you hadn't mentioned it.

Excellent vocal!

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Beautiful pop ballad, nicely kept in 3 minutes which feels even too short. Missing rhymes don't bother me, the story is more important. And here it has nice romantic imagery with strong yearning. Like the way you end the verses with a minor key, also has some other nice chord surprises. Arrangement is very relaxing, the banjo and the pedal steel create the right melancholy mood. Very good vocal performance.

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Oh yeah, that is a powerful song, the Vocal is alive and moving, the instruments complement the style perfectly. Cliff

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Agreed! The lack of rhyme is no big thing on the whole.
The rest of it carries this piece.
If anything, you could try EQing some of the harsh tone out of the vocal on this type of song.

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No rhyming required Scott! I wouldn't have noticed if you had not said something because the song is so good! Beautiful work! Take care, T




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Scott,
You did great minding time pinch. Well laid out composition, If you didn't mention, I would not even have paid attention to rhyme thing, flows very well. Cool phrasing - good lesson!
Vocals are great and delivery is strong, but I feel they are a bit on high EQ side to my ears.
In any case, I salute you for effort in bringing this to life with so much happening on all fronts. It does not feel rushed at all. Thank you for sharing.

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Floyd, Bawb, Tano, Tunemonger, Tommy, Tano, Dero, Deryk, Marty, Dave, Janne, Cliftond, and Torry:
Thank you all so much for giving my little song a listen and taking the time to leave me a comment.

Gary, there is no specific mystery woman here. I guess you could say it's an amalgamation of memories.

RayC, I appreciate your comment about it being my best vocal. Funny thing is that I don't like it much, but my wife told me to keep it. I was going to rerecord it.

Vic and Misha
: I can't figure out how to remove the high eq without doing too much damage. I've lost my upper frequencies in my hearing and just got a hearing aid last month. (Now I can hear what I am singing smile ) I am using Nectar 3 for the vocals and am trying to make sense of the instructions for the "follow EQ" but I am still lost.

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Hi Scott,

that's a super-cool tune. Very experimental and creative; I wouldnÄt have even noticed that there were no rhymes (must consider if that might be an alternative to squeezing out RhymeZone cool ).

And I must say that your vocal is simply outstanding with this song. Very, very, very good.

All the best,

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Really nicely done!! Such a nice poetic lyric and the perfect band to carry the reflective mood....banjo works really well in this! GREAT stuff, my fave of yours!! Take care. Greg

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