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No question, it's a great "back-story". But I think you did yourself (and the song) a "disservice" (by telling it). It becomes a "derivative" - when it could STAND ON IT'S OWN. Take this song, as it is, and put a "harder" production to it... A snappy drum, a pounding bass, and a "hard-hitting" guitar and it could ROCK!! And be the very cool, well written song that it is - without the "background"... it's that good.




+1

BTW, I love your voice and those harmonies are heavenly. I'd like it a little longer with an added lyric bridge a repeated chorus or both. But nothing wrong with leaving them wanting more. OOps I shouldn't have said chorus since it's an aaba song. Sorry typing before thinking.

Last edited by Sundance; 02/17/13 07:07 PM.