Guitarhacker

that is great advice. I am going to attempt a r-write

Kemmrich

thanks for the words I am going to try to re-write this. As mentioned I wrote this for the pat pattison lesson's. I did an You'll be crying for my love at night, Stable Verse, & Unstable Chorus I thought that this sounded pretty good. Here is what I came up with by adding another 2 verses and using the same chorus. I know that this is breaking the rules. It does not sound to bad though because of the repetition. That is only in my opinion though. I do really appreciate the feedback. I am just writing with experimentation in mind, that is why I am looking for feedback to increase the knowledge of my writing. In my years of education I know that classes can only teach you so much. You have to sort of take the bull by the horns and teach yourself if you want to become real good at it. So, that is what I am doing. so, Just so you can get the just of this song here are the full lyrics.


You'll be crying for my love at night

4 Bar Intro

1st verse
You know I loved you for so long
I found out you didn't really care at all
Where did our love go wrong?
You set my heart up for a fall

Chorus:
Now you’ll be crying for my love at night
Through the endless tears of all my pain
now why don't you just let me be?
You'll be crying for my love at night
You had to give me all this pain
Cause' it's another love that went so wrong

2nd verse
I have had all that I can take
I still love you in so many ways
This hurt goes on and on
And I ain’t gonna’ take no more

Chorus:
Now you’ll be crying for my love at night
Through the endless tears of all my pain
now why don't you just let me be?
You'll be crying for my love at night
You had to give me all this pain
Cause' it's another love that went so wrong

Solo 8 Bar solo

3rd Verse
These tears I cried are not in vain
I know I’ll find love again someday
The thought of you’s driving me insane
My love for you stops here today

Chorus:
Now you’ll be crying for my love at night
Through the endless tears of all my pain
now why don't you just let me be?
You'll be crying for my love at night
You had to give me all this pain
Cause' it's another love that went so wrong
Went so wrong, m, m, m, m, m, m, went so wrong, fade to ending

© Robert, A. Pidgeon 2013 all rights reserved

Scottt709
Thanks for your positive comments. I edited this in music creator 6. I added some effect to get the nice guitar sounds.

PgFantastic
and also thanks for your praise on this. I did the final production in my fostex vf08 digital recorder. I do all my songs this way.

Last edited by trapper456; 10/08/13 09:47 PM. Reason: to change a word
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