Cool tune.... you asked for crits on this.

The mix sounds fairly decent. The vox really doesn't set as well as it should into the mix.

The verses are really similar to the chorus so it's hard to instantly know where one is in the song. I was trying to imagine myself singing this.....I couldn't imagine singing about "corporate profits" in a church song.

The part that starts sorrow greets us everyday is a really hard part to sing with the "pastel" chords and unusual progression in there. You hit it again with new words later....

Several clicks in the song need to be removed.

I think you have a good idea here, that needs to be worked out a bit more.

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