Scott,

This is a wonderful listen.

I really like the non-rhyming verses. As I hear it, you have used assonance, alliteration and consonance very astutely as the glue that holds these sections together. Then, when the chorus comes along, the chorus rhymes are made all the more noticeable and more important because of the lack of earlier rhyming. I also really like the way you've uses three consecutive rhymes in the chorus and then ended with a non-rhyming fourth line. Interestingly, the long 'I' sound in "skies", "eyes", "lies" is a dipthong that finishes when a softer, long 'E' sound that has a gentle sonic link with the long 'E' sound in "Hold me". As I see it, this is very, very clever lyric writing.

The melody, your singing, your arrangement and production all worked really well through my headphones this morning.

I enjoyed it!

All the best,
Noel


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