It's a good lyric for the tone of the music .
The vocal is a little forward and there's some essing and harshness on the usual sounds that could be addressed easily enough.
Personally I'd be tempted to treat the vocal with something to give it an "old timey" sound. It's a bit present and has a little proximity bass.
In terms of the vocal delivery there are a few spots where the melody/flow seems forced and there's the odd warble that could be tidied up with an autotune style VST.
COOL stuff regardless of my nit picking.


Cheers
rayc
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