I agree with all the prior posters - great song, well done - vocals, arrangement, mix: all good.

But... I'll confess that if you hadn't said the song was about family violence, I wouldn't have been able to figure it out myself. The arc of the story is clear - trauma, with hope at the end. It's just specifics which are fuzzy. For example, is red supposed to refer to blood (which is salty), rage (the fire/water analogy), something else, or all the above?

Sometimes I'm just too darned literal when listening to lyrics, and miss the forest for the trees. blush

Since you said you were trying to paint the broad outlines without specifics, you've succeeded in spades! (No, I'm not being sarcastic).

Nicely done.


-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?