Hi Bob,

Wow this is good.

I love that opening verse.

Originally Posted By: rsdean
I’m watching you from the window
In this rundown Soho dump
Ordering coffee and bagels
From the guy in that blue truck

This is such good scene-setting writing. Time is set to 'right now' using the present verb tense and I love how 'watching you from the window' sets location so very, very well.

I also loved the phrase "friday night highway honcho". Those three long "i" sounds sitting side-by-side and the way they seamlessly overlap with the "h" alliteration is excellent ear candy! When I heard you sing this, I had to stop the track and just repeat the line a few times to myself... it caught my fancy smile

Terrific listening!

All the best,
Noel


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