This is nicely done.

It has a light airy feeling as some others have mentioned. I'd also say there's more than a little bit of a jazz influence in there too.

One of the things I tend to obsess over is my twin leads. It's often a lot of work and effort to get the 2 different leads exactly the same in their phrasing and in their harmony. What I heard here was quote a bit of dead on then it wandered.... If that was intentional, or you got lazy.... and I don't mean that in a bad way.... it takes a lot of time and overdubs to nail it exactly.... it still sounded really good. I'm just picking nits.

I also felt the drums could have used a bit more strength.... more thump in the kick/snap in the snare.... and again... just a personal preference.

All together, a nice job and a really creative melody in that song. I enjoyed it.

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