Please tell me if this belongs in another forum - I asked around and it sounded like the right place.

I'm working on this phrase that I cooked up with BIAB and using some VSTi synth guitars, and I'm kind of partial to it and have a number of ideas for expanding on it, but I have the dreaded feeling that it's just a variation on some piece of a famous work. So I wanted to toss it out here for some feedback. I'm also interested to hear if there is too much discordance in the note combinations. I tend to lean toward a degree of discordance in my compositions, but I'm just really trying to get more tension and drama out of it. I've found some great references to some music theory videos on this forum, but I haven't had a chance to digest it and apply it yet.

Note - it's still a bit messy and the timings are not quite there, but I wanted to get this initial feedback before I really put some work into it.

Any input is appreciated - thank you.

https://soundcloud.com/user-415064494/guitar-anthem-phrase/s-UXqie


Ed Z

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