Cool tune.. I like this and yeah.... that could be my story in those words somewhere.

Kinda curious... Verses 1 & 2 are half the length of verse 3. Any particular reason for that?

I know that once you have a song in finished form as this is, it's kinda hard, or daunting, to go back and make major structural changes.... but...
I'd think about combining V1 & V2 into one verse and place a chorus after it in the structure of the song. That would give a certain harmony and symmetry to the structure of the song. You'd essentially be removing the first chorus.... and actually, in a DAW, that would be a fairly simple, straightforward, and seamless chop. It could be done with the finished wave in a DAW. Remove the chorus and drag the parts together and you'd likely be done and no one would be able to tell.

Anyway, just a thought.

I like the song.

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