beautifully emotive with great lyrics.

if i can make a suggestion ?
for some reason, i hear... try a vocal double marty ?

ie keep current vocs but do another vocal trak singing along with original and placed just under the current vocal.
its an old production trick and can work really well on this type of song.
experiment with it only in places and also all the way through in a subtle fashion. eg choruses// changes.

nice song.
best.
OM


New Song "PRETTY GIRL" for my wife...Dec 2023
(my vocs....mixed for good earbuds.)
https://soundcloud.com/alfsongs/prettygirlrbfinalcalfsongsdec2023mp3
(and rock song THE STALLION and bluegrass song... BANKER MAN....90 songs useing bb/rb.)