Hi Folks.
Here is one of the newer tunes I am working on.  A lyrical co-write with Ray C. (rayc). I tapped Nadya to sing BGV. For a couple of weeks I was trying to mix this tune. With about a dozen tries, I am not sure if I am going in the right direction. If you have a suggestion on the balance (particular instrument(s), or vocals to backing ratio) of the mix, I would appreciate any constructive suggestions. Thank you for listening!

Countdown

Here is a more recent mix applying several suggestions from this thread:

Remix


Lyrics:

Burned out lightbulb,
Books on the shelf collecting dust.
Radio: fallen victim to silence,
No sunshine in the future forecast.
I don't want to
stare at the clock of a final countdown.
I don't want to
witness the darkness trying on a crown.

Sacred wild flowers,
Placid silver clouds.
Passing lazy hours,
Ardent cicadas drones.
Change in the wind's direction,
Hesitant intersections.
Towers of glass and stone.

They say you must be forgiving:
File your nails and fangs.
But children keep on dying,
From your bullets and tanks.
I don't want to
stare at the clock of final countdown.
I don't want to
witness the darkness trying out crown.

Sacred dried flowers,
Acid silver clouds.
Passing with the hours,
Ardent activists drone.
Change in the world's direction,
Requisite intersections.
Powers to learn and hone.

Cracked sky ceiling,
Thoughts from a notebook lacking trust.
Radios murmur in defiance,
Future embedded in cast.
I don't want to
Trigger the clock of the final countdown.
I don't want to
Enter the darkness wearing this crown.

In a heat of debate it's hard to confess,
That by the end of the game pawn and the king go to the same wooden chest
Nevertheless there are those who possessed,
Who will cling to lies till their last giving breath,
Stabbing heart with a smile and caress



Tech stuff:
Lyrics: Me / Ray Cochrane
Vocals: Me
BGV: Nadya
BIAB:
711:Bass, Acoustic, Bossa Ev 085
1004:Guitar, 12-String Acoustic, Rhythm ClassicRockStrumming Ev16 065
1829:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm PopModernGrooveBrightArp Ev16 075
2446:Guitar, Baritone Electric, Background SpaghettiWestern Ev 065
2099:Piano, Rhythm PopModernGrooveHeld Ev16 075
3330:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm LoungeFunkChorus Ev16 080
1904: Piano Bossa
2668: Pedal steel
1902: Guitar
RealDrums Americana16thsSyncFred^1-a:QuarterHiHat,Snare , b:QuarterRide,Snare

Synths of Halion and Kontakt.
Recorded in Cakewalk.

Last edited by Rustyspoon#; 11/22/21 06:08 PM.