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Hi Everyone, I wrote this song some years ago. When I used to go for lunch I always saw this girl sitting on the pavement outside the big shops. She was beautiful but so sad begging for money. I thought that under different circumstances her life could have been so different - hence song. It was semi-finalist in UK Song Competition 2008. http://www.box.net/shared/l99xavy62oCity Girl Verse 1 Bm G Why do you sit so alone each day in that spot? Bm G Your blue eyes sparkle even with your sadness A Bm Are you twisted like a gordian knot A Bm Youth & sorrow - so sad F#m You could be a lady A A lady of grace F#m A royal queen A A queen of our race CHORUS E F#m City girl do you see me as I pass your spot E F#m One day we might smile and say hello E F#m But tomorrow you may be gone, unfairly so G F#m Since I suppose you've no where to go VERSE 2 Bm G You're in my head an image changing over time Bm G A collage of colours flashing in my mind A Bm You sit alone in your silk so fine A Bm Young and apart - so grand F#m You could be a lady A A lady on high F#m A royal queen A A queen of the sky CHORUS VERSE 3 Bm G Do you know that you've been seen many times before Bm G You frequent all the capitals of the world A Bm A life enclosed without a door A Bm Lost and inward - so strange F#m You could be a lady A A lady of worth F#m A royal queen A A queen of this earth CHORUS VERSE 4 Bm G Can either of us know what's real for the other one Bm G Far less predict the thoughts that will come next A Bm We live to gamble - it's no fun A Bm In this way I'm just like you F#m You could be a lady A A lady in debt F#m A royal queen A A queen of roulette CODA E F#m City girl do you see me as I pass you by E F#m To day we might smile and say goodbye E F#m And tomorrow you could be gone, another tie G F#m A new life could then just have begun Hope you enjoy it and any comments much appreciated Jim
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Nice work! Very nice melody. Well done! Thanks for sharing! Listen To My MusicRead My Blog
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Hi Jim,
Once again you've written a very poignant song.
I like this song as it makes you think about people you would normally walk right past.
I would have liked to hear a small instrumental taking place of one of the verse breaks just to give it more colour.
Keep up the good work.
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Well done Mate. Has a well laid out arrangement. I think I would have added harmony on the chorus's. Maybe do a build up of each chorus. None on the 1st. Parts on the 2nd. Full in the rest of 'em.
Good on ya Jim. I like it.
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Wow, great lyrics with an outstanding vocal and very good backing track.
I agree with Russ that harmonies during the chorus would be a nice addition. Also I would like to hear a more intricate and/or varying leads between the chorus and the verses. That would put it over the top for me. However this is excellent as is and it’s going into my keeper folder.
I want my last spoken words to be "I hid a million dollars under the........................"
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Hi PgFantastic, Michee, Russ and Mario,
Thank you all for your kind comments and pleased you liked the song.
I think the idea of adding harmony during the chorus and also giving variation to the solos in between the verses are great suggestions. I will do this as I am sure it will improve the song.
Thank you all for listening
Jim
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Hi Jim,
I enjoyed listening to that! It's always interesting to me to hear other writers work and 'the story' behind the song!
Can I ask, how did you create the backing track and record the vocal?
Regards,
Frank
New to BIAB and just got hold of a 2007 Megapak... but I have been writing songs for quite awhile... most of them hits (of course..) :-)
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Hi Frank,
This was done on the Yamaha Claviniva CVP309 - drum backing track from BIAB and a guitar track from a style, other tracks I played in myself and recorded into Garageband. The vocal was also done on the Clavonova and recorded as a separate track into Garageband.
Thanks for listening and I am pleased that you enjoyed the song.
Regards
Jim
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Hi again Jim,
Thanks for the detailed explanation! Fascinating for a BIAB newbie like me! I can tell your song is written from the heart, that's the best place! I shall listen again now!
Frank
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Hi Frank,
Thanks again and enjoy
Jim
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Very nice melody.Thanks for sharing your life personal experience with us.It' s really a very interesting theme.
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Very nice. Harmony might add variety - but it is a personal story - maybe just coming from you is the best way. Put the variety between the verses.
Thanks for sharing
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Hi quran and Powderman
Thanks for listening and pleased to liked the song.
I agree a bit more variety between verses will add interest and i will do this.
Thanks again
Jim
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Nice melody,so touching...
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Hi Bill,
Very pleased you liked it Bill and thanks for listening
Jim
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