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Hello forum friends. The story behind this song is total nonsense but the hook line (title) is based in reality. I like shopping at Grocery Outlet (a discount grocery store). I'm hopelessly addicted to finding deals. About a year ago, they were blowing out a 100 percent juice drink called "Fave" for 99 cents for a 48 oz bottle. I bought 6 cases of 8 bottles and drank it for months. The same store had a deal on Bacardi coconut rum. The fave was sweet but not overly sweet like orange or pineapple juice and the two blended together were AMAZING! It was my favorite drink for months. Obviously "Fave and coconut rum" is not catchy but I thought of "OJ and coconut rum" and it just sang well. The melody of the opening line of the chorus popped into my head and I sang it intermittently for a few weeks. It sounded Buffett to me. So, I wrote the song, doing my best to steal Jimmy's voice, persona, and make BIAB my coral reefers. I didn't realize til I recorded it that I blew the rhyme scheme (I knew Noel would catch that), and that I stole the second line (a few stolen...) from Michael Franks (sorry Michael). Also, on first listen outside the headphones, I realize it's bass deficient. Hope you enjoy. Comments encouraged! Take care. Greg https://soundcloud.com/gjohnson-2/ojsslvocdec OJ and coconut rum She was the first girl I ever loved Since I was seventeen A few stolen kisses and several near misses Some disasters in between Hard as I tried, it just didn’t work out Then I lost my house and crashed my car Got on a silver bird and headed south And ended up here in this bar OJ and coconut rum Be hell to pay when the morning comes But that’s OK, I got nowhere to run (to) And no one to ask to forgive I’ll string a hammock between two strong trees Drift away on the island breeze Dream of adventures on the seven seas Of a life I never lived I couldn’t resist the kindness in her eyes And asked her for a dance Talked for an hour and by then I knew That she was my last chance But she was young and I was turnin’ gray Kindred spirits on two paths that crossed I’ll drink a toast now to the ones that say “Better to have loved and have lost” OJ and coconut rum Know I’ll feel better when my mind gets numb For what ails me now there ain’t no cure But that bottle can help me forget Sorry if I start to bring you down But how ‘bout bringin’ me another round Some say that drinkin’ ain’t the way to go But tonite I’ll find out for sure Some say our fate is written in the stars Decided before we arrive I only know before I leave this bar I better find somebody to drive OJ…
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Greg, even the intro has a 'palm trees swaying in the breeze' feel.
I really liked the lyrics - somber in places, and the steel in there fitted subtlety nicely too.
And a great last verse - I really got a laugh.
Another top delivery.
Trev
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Hi Greg.
Great song with a super storyline.
Excellent backing track with a particularly nice stereo wash.
Vocals well up to your usual high standard.
ROG.
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Very nice Greg. Buffetty, if that's a word. Agree on the rum, but mine is a Cuba Libre these days. Regards, Bob
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I was able to kick back and just enjoy your song this morning after you jumped out, grabbed all the nits you could find, some visible, some not and posted them in your opening comments. Cut us off at the knees, so to speak. So, relaxed and free from critique and with my first cup of coffee, I just listened. And, I was not disappointed. This is a very good write and the song fit your vocals really nice.
Your arrangement did a good job capturing the Buffett/Chesney Island rhythm. Not a nit but just sharing another 'flavor' you may want to consider in future acoustic based songs; Alternate tuned acoustic guitars such as a double dropped D or high strung or even just a capo'd 2nd acoustic works really in this type of song.
This was a fun listen to start off the day. Enjoyed it.
Last edited by Charlie Fogle; 11/18/15 01:46 AM.
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Cool tune.
The first verse had me thinking Jimmy Buffett... changes in attitudes, changes in latitudes a bit.... not enough to consider infringement.... just enough to say, hey, that sounds kinda like......
Cool story in the song.
Nits... you caught a few of your own. That's a good thing. Mixing on cans.... I do it on occasion. It's always important to listen on a well balanced monitor system. I don't take the cans off and hit the monitors. I allow at a minimum, one hour or better yet, next day since the cans are like ear candy and change your perception of the monitors.
BGV are slightly off key.
The rhyme scheme didn't really catch my attention. You have a few nice lyric lines in there regardless.
All in all, a good song, well done, and enjoyable.
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Greg, This would be well received at one of the many Tiki Bars here in Florida. I enjoyed the song with some very nice lines in there. Once again a super lead vocal. The BGV were out of tune in spots. I would have used the steel a little more sparingly as fills in the choruses only as opposed to pads throughout. As I do with all your songs, I enjoyed my listen very much. Tom
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Hi Greg,
nice lyrics. The last verse made me laugh. I like your vocals. Nice arrangement. It transports some island feeling. A very enjoyable listen. Thanks for the background story.
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Awesome tune Greg. Excellent story in the lyrics
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It's all been said so all that I can add is Jimmy Buffet has some serious competition.
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This is a great write Greg. Love the JB influence.
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Greg a very enjoyable listen! I liked everything that I heard so pat yourself on the back for this one...you deserve it! Sonny
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Excellent vocal - pretty song - well written.
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A very smooth, All-American sounding song ;-) That harmonica and steel guitar complements the arrangement very nicely!
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I always like hearing the song's story:)
I agree about those BGV's, but you totally captured that island vibe with this solid tune, and yet it's unique somehow. Island Country?
All I know is that I like it, a lot!
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Greg,
Great job of finding that Buffett sound/feel in BIAB! From the opening bars, it's sand and sea and umbrella drinks...
"A few stolen kisses and several near misses Some disasters in between"
I like that.
"Some say that drinkin’ ain’t the way to go But tonite I’ll find out for sure"
...and that...
The mix sounds great. Always love your vocals...
Enjoyed all of my listens.
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Greg, relaxing and chillin' music. Up to your normal high standards.
good words and vocals
enjoyed Alyn
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"Some say our fate is written in the stars Decided before we arrive I only know before I leave this bar I better find somebody to drive"
Man, that is so cool. From high philosophical musings to cold reality in four lines. Wow.
Great, as floyd, mentioned in finding the JB sound with BiaB. Wrapped up in a fine mix also.
Wonderful story with many vibrant images -- enough for several songs!
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Hi Greg. You certainly got the JB style off to a T. The Pacific cruising sailors in the late 70's were much into music like this. Introduced me to JB's music. Lovely job. Cheers.
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Greg, even the intro has a 'palm trees swaying in the breeze' feel.
I really liked the lyrics - somber in places, and the steel in there fitted subtlety nicely too.
And a great last verse - I really got a laugh.
Another top delivery.
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Thanks Trevor. Really appreciate the kind words, and your so consistent support for my songs. Means a lot to me! Take care. Greg
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