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In my last post, I mentioned how many songs I've written and how many I've thrown away. As I said, I started writing when I was 14. The first song I ever "kept" came about 6 years later (1975). First time I had thought... "This doesn't totally suck."  I only keep it still for the sake of nostaglia. I figured I'd throw it against the wall here. Warts and all. Beginnings. It's slow and meloncholy (my first real broken heart). A 3-verse song. Standard for the times. I quit writing 3-verse songs about 1985. So...going back 45 years... REALLY THERE'S NOTHING TO SAY the sunshine won't get out of my eyes the salt won't get out of my wounds a new woman won't get out of my mind but i'll probably make my move too soon five hundred miles from my last mistake and still it stands in my way now everything hangs on her next words but really there's nothing to say maybe she'll love me, maybe she won't maybe i don't even care maybe i'll find what i'm looking for or maybe it couldn't be there but every fool needs somebody who can help him forget yesterday so maybe i'll use my usual lines but really there's nothing to say i might tell the story of why i am here how a broken heart lead the way but a stronger man would have made his stand i just walked away so i'll spare you the details and myself the pain of a woman who's that far away perhaps i should write i thought that i might but really there's nothing to say five hundred miles from my last mistake and still it stands in my way now everything hangs on her next words but really there's nothing to say really there's nothing to say The BAND: RealTracks in style: 366:Bass, Electric, Country Ev 065 RealTracks in style: ~364:Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking Ev 065 RealTracks in song: ~2200:Guitar, Nylon, Background CountryBrent Ev 085 RealTracks in song: ~~369:Pedal Steel, Background Ev 065 MIDI SuperTracks in song: 2066:Piano, Rhythm NewAgeAnswers Ev16 110 Harmonies generated using TC Helicon plugin in RealBand But, really...You can say something if you feel like it...  Thanks for listening. fj
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The piano fits really well.
I'm glad this didn't get a ride in the ejector seat as it's a lovely, heart bruised song.
No nits...I'm glad you tried the resurrection without the shuffle.
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It's a given that all of your productions are of the highest standard and this outing is no exception. That said , I would love to hear this pared down to a sparse and simple piano or picked guitar ( à la Tom Waits) accompaniment. The fervent passionate quality of the lyrics are more than enough to carry the song with minimum distraction . I am not a fan of the sound of TC Helicon generated harmonies. These are very timeless, worldly and enlightened lyrics coming from a 20 year old written 45 yers ago and I love "warts and all" which to my mind, is bona fide truth and therefor far more interesting. Thank you for your wonderful music. I hope you have LOTS more to say ps Hey I just did the math , 20 in 1975 ? we are the same age!
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Hi Floyd ...
First, Gary and you are dang near youngsters in my time frame ... I'll be 74 in March. YIKES!!!!
Glad this one missed the trash can. Most of us would probably be very happy to have written most of your throwaways. This is so poignant yet a compelling listen. For the era, this would have been a great cross-over song.
The movie of this sad journey played in my mind's eye as each word lead to the next.
You remind me, in one very strong aspect, of a female friend of mine and a wonderful lyricist from Iowa. And that is, you have an uncanny and rare ability to reach into the hidden and unfiltered emotions of the human soul and translate them into the tangible medium of a powerful song. I not only listened to this song, but I felt it as I listened. Other than that, there's really nothing left for me to say.
Happy holidays to you and yours from both of us.
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Man, you were 20 when you wrote this?! I started writing songs probably around the same time as you, and we are a similar age. I'm a year older actually. Main difference is your stuff was good  This is great, floyd, excellent vocal too. More please! Hope you and yours have a great Christmas.
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It's a given that all of your productions are of the highest standard and this outing is no exception. That said , I would love to hear this pared down to a sparse and simple piano or picked guitar ( à la Tom Waits) accompaniment. The fervent passionate quality of the lyrics are more than enough to carry the song with minimum distraction . I am not a fan of the sound of TC Helicon generated harmonies. These are very timeless, worldly and enlightened lyrics coming from a 20 year old written 45 yers ago and I love "warts and all" which to my mind, is bona fide truth and therefor far more interesting. Thank you for your wonderful music. I hope you have LOTS more to say ps Hey I just did the math , 20 in 1975 ? we are the same age! Gary - your comments got me thinking... I had added the harmonies at the last minute before I uploaded the song - and they were (for one thing) too loud. So I toned them down a bit. And your suggestion of a "pared down" backing made me try it without drums - which I think made it more effective. So. I remixed and uploaded a new version. Thanks for the suggestions...
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The piano fits really well.
I'm glad this didn't get a ride in the ejector seat as it's a lovely, heart bruised song.
No nits...I'm glad you tried the resurrection without the shuffle. Thanks, ray! shuffle?
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Stunning, tender and heartwrenching. So melodic, like most (if not indeed all) of your songs. So well delivered, too. You wrote this when you were 20? Wow. They say that, if a man has a heart in his chest, that heart lasts forever ... and you sure have a superb musical heart in there. Keep sharing ... this was really, genuinely beautiful. Happy Christmas.
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Wow, 1975. 14 years old. You brought me back to the struggle it was to get good recordings without noise back then. My first attempts were with two small Panasonic cassette recorders and a patch cable. Then, I got the glorious Teac reel-to-reel, but even with that, noise was always an issue. The only solution was to go in the studio, save your money and watch the studio clock. That only happened a couple times. Ah, the good old days. Not! If only we'd have had BIAB back then.
This was a treat to listen to, really enjoyed the 70s form (Ha! I still use it!) and it was obvious a great talent was blossoming. Nice to hear the origin of it all, thanks for giving us a fascinating look back.
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Another lovely song Floyd. Beautiful vocal and lyric. Perfect instrumentation and as always perfect production.
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Sad and lovely song. Love everything about it. What warts? I mean, maybe the word fool, except you use to here to create a nice inner rhyme with who, so that's entirely justified. As usual - apparently even back then - solid storytelling and arc. The pared-down arrangement really puts your voice front and center, where it shines. Thanks for posting it!
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Wow! 14? I don't think I started until 19. It was a song about Jewish concentration camps called "Monday Mourning." A bit too heavy of subject matter for my friends and girlfriend of the time to relate to. So, I'm impressed you went the relatable route right away!
I think this song is beautiful. The picked guitar works well with the background fills. Then that piano comes in to bring it to another level without seeming like you are adding too much to get there.
I will take it a step further by saying I didn't get to hear it with drums. Thank you for that! It's one thing to not need them, it's another if they take a song where it shouldn't go.
Thanks for sharing this.
To you 14 year old self, stick with this. You will touch many with your wonderful songs.
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The piano fits really well.
I'm glad this didn't get a ride in the ejector seat as it's a lovely, heart bruised song.
No nits...I'm glad you tried the resurrection without the shuffle. Thanks, ray! shuffle? The Resurrection Shuffle https://youtu.be/XpH5ke-C_80
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There is plenty to say about this, most of it has already been said, so I'll just say bravo, another great song to be proud of.
Great writing as always.
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There's just stacks to like about this, but one thing that stands out are exceptional lyrics.
Combined with a thoroughly beautiful melody, and delivered - as you say - in your more youthful years, this actually represents creative genius.
Yes, this is a keeper, no question.
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Man, even at 14 you had a keen ear. This DOESN'T suck! I couldn't see the warts --couldn't hear them either. I like the piano --heck, the whole production. Broken hearts have created many good songs, and this one is right at the top. Merry Christmas, Floyd.
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Hi Floyd ...
First, Gary and you are dang near youngsters in my time frame ... I'll be 74 in March. YIKES!!!!
Glad this one missed the trash can. Most of us would probably be very happy to have written most of your throwaways. This is so poignant yet a compelling listen. For the era, this would have been a great cross-over song.
The movie of this sad journey played in my mind's eye as each word lead to the next.
You remind me, in one very strong aspect, of a female friend of mine and a wonderful lyricist from Iowa. And that is, you have an uncanny and rare ability to reach into the hidden and unfiltered emotions of the human soul and translate them into the tangible medium of a powerful song. I not only listened to this song, but I felt it as I listened. Other than that, there's really nothing left for me to say.
Happy holidays to you and yours from both of us.
Alan & Di Alan - thanks for the great review. It is always nice to know that a lyric "touches" someone. (even those from when I was young and foolish)... Sorry that I wiped out your Soundcloud comment when I uploaded a new mix... Man, you were 20 when you wrote this?! I started writing songs probably around the same time as you, and we are a similar age. I'm a year older actually. Main difference is your stuff was good This is great, floyd, excellent vocal too. More please! Hope you and yours have a great Christmas. Thanks, Dave. Songwriting has been the most constant thing in my life all these years - along with my wife, that is... I met her when I was 14, too... And Merry Christmas to you and yours! I look forward to more great music from you in the coming year...
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Heard both versions - prefer the 2nd one, has a very evocative 70's singer songwriter vibe (albeit written I think in 1969).
Lovely performance, and an appealing song from an earlier time.
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14 eh? Bud was 65 before he wrote and it shows 50 years is a long time at that craft and the more we learn about what you were doing earlier the more remarkable the consistently high level of writing over those years becomes. Wish I could have periodically gone through your garbage -- I'd have a catalog to be proud of! Well you can certainly be 20 and have these feelings but the ability to express them via a lovely song write is allocated to a select few. As Janice said, "it is beautifully sung and I like the sparse band." Add the fine lyric and production to that and the bases are pretty much covered. Excellent! J&B
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Hi Floyd
While I've heard only the second version, the simple arrangement seems to me to fit the mood perfectly. That's really quite a song for a twenty year old. I guess I started writing at around fifteen but my journey to 'this doesn't totally suck' took quite a bit longer than yours!
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So in other words you were born this way. The production with the help of BIAB is no doubt much better but the innate talent was most likely always there. Your understanding of how words rub up against each other and the melodies that somehow are born from your subconscious catalogue of musical memories is on full display here. No doubt you have refined your skills but the inner sense of rhythm (which I have always said can’t be taught) was always there from the beginning. If you hadn’t divulged the origin of this song we would have never had guessed the age. It doesn’t suck! It is always a pleasure to listen to your professionally written, performed and produced works, Tom
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Hi, Floyd !
You really shine on this one
as if you had´nt done it before
but there is so much emotion
in this one so I can hear
the difference !
Lovely tune and......
I hope that nothin´stands
in your way anymore !
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Now this is a good slow dancing song. It's good to hear some early Floyd. The lyrics of your youth certainly bring back the memories of youth in the listener. I like the pared down instrumentation.
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All I want for Christmas is a new old song by Floyd! Great tune bro'. Thanks for digging into the archive. Merry Christmas man!!
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Oh Ray,
Ashton, Gardner & Dyke - they had completely slipped out of my memory - ... Thanks, you made my day - gonna have a Spotify dive, I think,
Happy new year and all the bestm,
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Hi Floyd,
very nice and emotional. Do you have an original recording of it? Would be great to listen to it.
Very nicely arranged and like always marvbellously sung. Sounds good all the way.
A healthy and most happy New Year to you and yours and take care,
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Hi floyd Jane,
It's a very nice song that you offer us. Lots of emotion in your voice and very well written lyrics. Well done.
Have a pleasant end of the year and take good care of yourself.
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Stunning, tender and heartwrenching. So melodic, like most (if not indeed all) of your songs. So well delivered, too. You wrote this when you were 20? Wow. They say that, if a man has a heart in his chest, that heart lasts forever ... and you sure have a superb musical heart in there. Keep sharing ... this was really, genuinely beautiful. Happy Christmas. James - thanks for the very nice review... Wow, 1975. 14 years old. You brought me back to the struggle it was to get good recordings without noise back then. My first attempts were with two small Panasonic cassette recorders and a patch cable. Then, I got the glorious Teac reel-to-reel, but even with that, noise was always an issue. The only solution was to go in the studio, save your money and watch the studio clock. That only happened a couple times. Ah, the good old days. Not! If only we'd have had BIAB back then.
This was a treat to listen to, really enjoyed the 70s form (Ha! I still use it!) and it was obvious a great talent was blossoming. Nice to hear the origin of it all, thanks for giving us a fascinating look back. Thanks, TM. In those early years, I never recorded anything - I had nothing to record on. I got a Tascam 4-track cassette recorder at some point - late 80's I think... it is still in the closet... Another lovely song Floyd. Beautiful vocal and lyric. Perfect instrumentation and as always perfect production.
Merry Xmas Floyd Thanks, Scott. Appreciate that...
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It's been a long time since I went back to the early songs. I never thought any of my earlier stuff sucked...... I guess ignorance was bliss. I've since learned a few things that I didn't know then.
I like the song. Kinda slow but you know that. It shows that you knew a good amount about song crafting even then.
I enjoyed listening.
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A beautiful song. It's very quiet (even though there is music, etc.) While all broken hearts hurt, some leave a very sweet aftertaste as time moves on. I love how the second last line of the stanzas are counted by the hook line. Expertly done. I like it. The band captured the mood of the song perfectly.
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Floyd this is a beauty, loved it from start to finish
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Sad and lovely song. Love everything about it. What warts? I mean, maybe the word fool, except you use to here to create a nice inner rhyme with who, so that's entirely justified. As usual - apparently even back then - solid storytelling and arc. The pared-down arrangement really puts your voice front and center, where it shines. Thanks for posting it! Thanks, David. I always enjoy reading what you have to say about all aspects of the song and music... Wow! 14? I don't think I started until 19. It was a song about Jewish concentration camps called "Monday Mourning." A bit too heavy of subject matter for my friends and girlfriend of the time to relate to. So, I'm impressed you went the relatable route right away!
I think this song is beautiful. The picked guitar works well with the background fills. Then that piano comes in to bring it to another level without seeming like you are adding too much to get there.
I will take it a step further by saying I didn't get to hear it with drums. Thank you for that! It's one thing to not need them, it's another if they take a song where it shouldn't go.
Thanks for sharing this.
To you 14 year old self, stick with this. You will touch many with your wonderful songs. I wrote some pretty depressing songs in those early years, but have to say, was never tempted to write one about concentration camps!! Zowie. Glad to have you stop by for a listen. Time to hear another from you! Maybe not that first one, though... The piano fits really well.
I'm glad this didn't get a ride in the ejector seat as it's a lovely, heart bruised song.
No nits...I'm glad you tried the resurrection without the shuffle. Thanks, ray! shuffle? The Resurrection Shuffle https://youtu.be/XpH5ke-C_80You continue to introduce me to previously-unknown music/bands!!
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Came back to hear the stripped-down version. I like it a lot. But I think a really good song will speak for itself as long as the arrangement and mix are anywhere near decent. This song does, indeed, speak for itself. And for the writer.
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There is plenty to say about this, most of it has already been said, so I'll just say bravo, another great song to be proud of.
Great writing as always.
Rob Rob - good to have you drop by...Thanks!! There's just stacks to like about this, but one thing that stands out are exceptional lyrics.
Combined with a thoroughly beautiful melody, and delivered - as you say - in your more youthful years, this actually represents creative genius.
Yes, this is a keeper, no question. Trev - Thanks for such a nice comment. (And thanks for dropping in on "A Better Me" as well!!) Man, even at 14 you had a keen ear. This DOESN'T suck! I couldn't see the warts --couldn't hear them either. I like the piano --heck, the whole production. Broken hearts have created many good songs, and this one is right at the top. Merry Christmas, Floyd. Thanks, Marty!! This was actually written when I was 20 - 14 is when I started writing. Trust me...you don't want to hear THOSE (and luckily, I cannot remember them...)
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Heard both versions - prefer the 2nd one, has a very evocative 70's singer songwriter vibe (albeit written I think in 1969).
Lovely performance, and an appealing song from an earlier time.
Peter Peter - I agree - the new mix was the right way to go - the drums were simply a wrong thing to add (as was the "over-done" harmonies). Just goes to show it's a good idea to let a song sit for a while to get the kinks out... Thanks for the nice words... 14 eh? Bud was 65 before he wrote and it shows 50 years is a long time at that craft and the more we learn about what you were doing earlier the more remarkable the consistently high level of writing over those years becomes. Wish I could have periodically gone through your garbage -- I'd have a catalog to be proud of! Well you can certainly be 20 and have these feelings but the ability to express them via a lovely song write is allocated to a select few. As Janice said, "it is beautifully sung and I like the sparse band." Add the fine lyric and production to that and the bases are pretty much covered. Excellent! J&B Thanks, y'all! 50 years. Were does the time go?? There's always something to write about - and, of course, when you start is irrelevant. You've got a knack for it - so keep 'em coming! Hi Floyd
While I've heard only the second version, the simple arrangement seems to me to fit the mood perfectly. That's really quite a song for a twenty year old. I guess I started writing at around fifteen but my journey to 'this doesn't totally suck' took quite a bit longer than yours!
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Leon "but my journey to 'this doesn't totally suck' took quite a bit longer" - those are the word choices of a guy who knows how to write... Thanks for the nice review, Leon...
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Hi floyD you are very gifted indeed so young to write like that. great choice of instruments mixed perfect thanks for sharing this song Eric
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So in other words you were born this way. The production with the help of BIAB is no doubt much better but the innate talent was most likely always there. Your understanding of how words rub up against each other and the melodies that somehow are born from your subconscious catalogue of musical memories is on full display here. No doubt you have refined your skills but the inner sense of rhythm (which I have always said can’t be taught) was always there from the beginning. If you hadn’t divulged the origin of this song we would have never had guessed the age. It doesn’t suck! It is always a pleasure to listen to your professionally written, performed and produced works, Tom Thanks, Tom. "how words rub up against each other..." I like that!! Sounds like it came from the pen of a good songwriter. Oh! It did! Thanks for the great comments!! Hi, Floyd !
You really shine on this one
as if you had´nt done it before
but there is so much emotion
in this one so I can hear
the difference !
Lovely tune and......
I hope that nothin´stands
in your way anymore !
Cheers
Dani Thanks, Dani!! Now this is a good slow dancing song. It's good to hear some early Floyd. The lyrics of your youth certainly bring back the memories of youth in the listener. I like the pared down instrumentation. Thanks, Scott. Appreciate the listen....
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All I want for Christmas is a new old song by Floyd! Great tune bro'. Thanks for digging into the archive. Merry Christmas man!! HA! And Happy Holidays to you!!!
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Both your maturity and sensitivity shine on that tune. Beautifully written and executed. The vocals and guitar blend so well together. Technically solid as well. It was a great listen, thank you!
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FJ,
Excellent resurrection. Sad and beautiful ballad. Listens as it was written yesterday. You kept the spirit of it very well for nearly half a century. Good stuff. Really There's Nothing More To Say... except for your description of the track. You meant this to rhyme, right? :
"I only keep it still for the sake of nostalgia.
I figured I'd throw it against the wall here.
Warts and all.
Beginnings.
It's slow and melancholy (my first real broken heart).
A 3-verse song. Standard for the times.
I quit writing 3-verse songs about 1985."
Thank you for sharing.
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Hi Floyd,
very nice and emotional. Do you have an original recording of it? Would be great to listen to it.
Very nicely arranged and like always marvbellously sung. Sounds good all the way.
A healthy and most happy New Year to you and yours and take care,
Stefan Stefan - Happy New Year to you and Maha! Hoping it's a good one! We deserve it!!! Hi floyd Jane,
It's a very nice song that you offer us. Lots of emotion in your voice and very well written lyrics. Well done.
Have a pleasant end of the year and take good care of yourself.
Kindly regards
Derochette
alias JaniJackflash
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It's been a long time since I went back to the early songs. I never thought any of my earlier stuff sucked...... I guess ignorance was bliss. I've since learned a few things that I didn't know then.
I like the song. Kinda slow but you know that. It shows that you knew a good amount about song crafting even then.
I enjoyed listening. Learning what needs to go in the trash is an important part of growth in writing. Thanks for the listen. A beautiful song. It's very quiet (even though there is music, etc.) While all broken hearts hurt, some leave a very sweet aftertaste as time moves on. I love how the second last line of the stanzas are counted by the hook line. Expertly done. I like it. The band captured the mood of the song perfectly. jpt - thanks! appreciate that...
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In my last post, I mentioned how many songs I've written and how many I've thrown away. As I said, I started writing when I was 14. The first song I ever "kept" came about 6 years later (1975). First time I had thought... "This doesn't totally suck." I only keep it still for the sake of nostaglia. I figured I'd throw it against the wall here. Warts and all. Beginnings. It's slow and meloncholy (my first real broken heart). A 3-verse song. Standard for the times. I quit writing 3-verse songs about 1985. So...going back 45 years... REALLY THERE'S NOTHING TO SAY the sunshine won't get out of my eyes the salt won't get out of my wounds a new woman won't get out of my mind but i'll probably make my move too soon five hundred miles from my last mistake and still it stands in my way now everything hangs on her next words but really there's nothing to say maybe she'll love me, maybe she won't maybe i don't even care maybe i'll find what i'm looking for or maybe it couldn't be there but every fool needs somebody who can help him forget yesterday so maybe i'll use my usual lines but really there's nothing to say i might tell the story of why i am here how a broken heart lead the way but a stronger man would have made his stand i just walked away so i'll spare you the details and myself the pain of a woman who's that far away perhaps i should write i thought that i might but really there's nothing to say five hundred miles from my last mistake and still it stands in my way now everything hangs on her next words but really there's nothing to say really there's nothing to say The BAND: RealTracks in style: 366:Bass, Electric, Country Ev 065 RealTracks in style: ~364:Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking Ev 065 RealTracks in song: ~2200:Guitar, Nylon, Background CountryBrent Ev 085 RealTracks in song: ~~369:Pedal Steel, Background Ev 065 MIDI SuperTracks in song: 2066:Piano, Rhythm NewAgeAnswers Ev16 110 Harmonies generated using TC Helicon plugin in RealBand But, really...You can say something if you feel like it... Thanks for listening. fj Very nice song, also great vocal color. Happy New Year guys
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What this proves is that you always have been and outstanding song writer, arranger, and musician.
Excellent work as usual. I didn't hear the original but this version is fantastic.
I want my last spoken words to be "I hid a million dollars under the........................"
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Floyd this is a beauty, loved it from start to finish Thanks, Graham. Came back to hear the stripped-down version. I like it a lot. But I think a really good song will speak for itself as long as the arrangement and mix are anywhere near decent. This song does, indeed, speak for itself. And for the writer.
Alan Alan - thanks for the return visit Hi floyD you are very gifted indeed so young to write like that. great choice of instruments mixed perfect thanks for sharing this song Eric
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That's a great song Floyd! Glad you reached back in time to resurrect this one! Tugs at the ole heartstrings! T
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FJ, You are definitely a very gifted wordsmith. We are extremely fortunate to have you on these PG Forums.
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Well, this may have been written when you were 20 or so but it will hang with anyone. The Beatles were not writing craft level songs or lyrics and some of their best product was 'mistakes' when they were writing in their early 20's...
Really enjoyed the history, arrangement, production and performance on this.
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Both your maturity and sensitivity shine on that tune. Beautifully written and executed. The vocals and guitar blend so well together. Technically solid as well. It was a great listen, thank you! Angelo - thanks for the great comments! FJ,
Excellent resurrection. Sad and beautiful ballad. Listens as it was written yesterday. You kept the spirit of it very well for nearly half a century. Good stuff. Really There's Nothing More To Say... except for your description of the track. You meant this to rhyme, right? :
"I only keep it still for the sake of nostalgia.
I figured I'd throw it against the wall here.
Warts and all.
Beginnings.
It's slow and melancholy (my first real broken heart).
A 3-verse song. Standard for the times.
I quit writing 3-verse songs about 1985."
Thank you for sharing.
Misha. HA! Thanks, Misha!! Nice to know this still "holds up" after all this time...
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Very nice song, also great vocal color. Happy New Year guys Thanks, Nikola... What this proves is that you always have been and outstanding song writer, arranger, and musician.
Excellent work as usual. I didn't hear the original but this version is fantastic. Thanks, Mario... That's a great song Floyd! Glad you reached back in time to resurrect this one! Tugs at the ole heartstrings! T Thanks, Torrey. Great to see you back around... FJ, You are definitely a very gifted wordsmith. We are extremely fortunate to have you on these PG Forums. Don - always great to hear from you!! You were one of the first people on the forum to respond to my music... I appreciate it... Well, this may have been written when you were 20 or so but it will hang with anyone. The Beatles were not writing craft level songs or lyrics and some of their best product was 'mistakes' when they were writing in their early 20's...
Really enjoyed the history, arrangement, production and performance on this. Thanks, Charlie. Always good to hear from you...
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Most people could write songs their whole life and never come up with something this good!! It really is sweet, and sad! Love your performance on this.....sure you couldn't sing like that back then. A truly lovely song!!! Thanks for sharing my friend! Take care. Greg
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