Nice work Kevin! There's a very good song here, and I like the evocative lyrics. It put me in mind of 'Heart of Gold'.
Maybe mute the vox harmony in the first chorus; cooler then when it comes in on the second and subsequent choruses. The final chorus at 2:10 I think needs to be 'bigger', i.e. all instruments and vox harmonies in: add another vox harmony on 3rds maybe?

John


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Cakewalk by BandLab
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