Wow.... very nicely done.

I like this a lot.

Your voice is really nice. Smooth and fits well in this genre and style.

So here's my comments.

There's a roar that comes in when you start singing and remains there throughout. It goes away after the singing so I'm guessing it's in the background on the vocal track.

I agree with (I think it was) Pat on the production decisions.... when to bring in the snare and the sax. I would probably not have chosen the sax since it seems out place in this gentle acoustic based tune..... maybe a nice acoustic guitar solo, or even a piano would fit nicely. Perhaps hammered dulcimer or mandolin would be really nice in there for the solo. And yeah.... Real Tracks have some nice mando tracks.... I'd swap the sax out and put the mando in it's place.

Always look for places in the song where you can ramp up or down as the need calls for when you bring in something like the snare from the side stick. It sounds more natural to the listener that way.

I really like that twist on the chords in there as well.

All in all very nicely done and just some minor production issues to deal with.

Iron out the production and other issues and this song could possibly have some nice commercial value in films and TV.... just saying....

Last edited by Guitarhacker; 11/03/14 11:33 AM.
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