Ok, I only have all of 10 minutes this morning to finally post a very few things.
First, really well done. The contrast and irony are great!
"Then the Big Machine started blowing smoke" Ha ha ha! What a great line. Are you including this song with your submission for internship? Still laughing...didn't see that one coming.
Nice hand claps. Very "current" sounding
I can just picture a bunch of 20-somethings singing along in agreement; but missing "it." Or a current country artist for that matter.
Great job David.