Hi John,

This is a terrific arrangement and the style really suits the reflective nature of the lyrics. You have a great voice and I was completely engaged by your song and its presentation, from start to end. I really liked the oboe. One small lyric thing that stood out to me as I was listening. It caused to me readjust my thinking. In verse 3, have you tried "Your unspoken words..." rather than "His unspoken words..."? What made it stand out to me was that "you" has been used to address the father up until this last line. Given your skill at songwriting, I imagine that you've already considered this and have made your decision. I point out on the off-chance that it might have slipped by.

All the best,
Noel


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