Hi Riccled,

It's a pity you havent added the lyrics in your post. Now I don't know what happened to the girl with the golden hair.
Your vocals sounded a bit 'shy' and are a bit too close to the mike.
Of course it's a romantic song as you said and you have to sound like that, but still some more conviction in your voice can work out well.
Your piano playing and how the band subtly enters (and the ooh's) is very nice and sweet, but sounds rather sad then romantic.

Something else: When you start singing I heard a sound as if a swich was turned on/out. This happens again when the band comes in. You must look at that.

Hans

Hans Berkhout
(Birchwood)
https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130