Hi Shigeki,

I also listened intensly to both your versions. They were both very nice, although I agree with Nigell the vocals could do with a little less volume.
And I prefer the first version more (the life band) because of two things:
1.The vocals are more intimate and, say, a bit warmer, though I heard some sibilance in that version (is that even possible with synth vocals?)
2. The strings are very nice
The second version had a very nice piano in it, but the vocals were a bit too loud (as I wrote before) and a bit harsh.

But talking about the overall performance and the melody; well, you did a great job on that!!!

Hans

Hans Berkhout
(Birchwood)
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