Hello all. It's been a while since I posted an original song. Well here's my latest. Going through a marriage seperation (not divorce) for the past 7 months. It's been a tough journey trying to understand her feelings with my logical brain! This song captures where I'm at now trying to understand her.

What I don't like so much is the chorus. Sounds a bit screechy but it was written and recorded within 48 hours. I would appreciate critical feedback for improvements.

Thanks

Soundcloud - Back To Me

Verse 1:
Since you walked out of that door
I've been broken and all alone
My heart's been crying out your name
Patiently waiting, you'll feel the same

Verse 2:
I'm understanding more each day
Why you left, so full of pain
I broke your spirit, I broke your soul
You felt unloved, you had to go

CHORUS
But you are beautiful to me
You light up my life with joy and peace
I cherish your love and company
Wo oh o my darling come home, back to me.

Verse 3:
We fought for years, I'm to blame
I did not love well, all the same
I criticized you and pulled you down
Instead of dealing with my pain

Verse 4:
But I will fight for you my love
Whatever it takes, I'll rise above
At our wedding, I said I do
And by His grace I'll see it through

CHORUS
You are beautiful to me
You light up my life with joy and peace
I cherish your love and company
Wo oh o my darling come home, back to me.

CHORUS 2
Your soul is beautiful to me
It lights up my life with grace and peace
I cherish your love and company
Wo oh o my darling come home, back to me.

Last edited by Paul Haynes; 03/11/24 10:10 AM.