Hi Pgfantastic,
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this may be just me, some others may want to give some input but I think you could do without this line [about 20 yds in front of me] of

the second verse


Interesting suggestion, I am always open to suggestions, but why? I would love to know your thoughts why.
The words just tumbled out on to the paper when I wrote the song.
To me it portrayed that moment when you see a friend in front of you in, say in a busy shopping mall, but miss them when you try to catch them and chat!
The only line I thought about was the"alyn alyn" bit and the third verse, which I rejected.

Thanks for the compliments, I appreciate them very much.

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