Originally Posted By: dcuny
Hi, Rob.

I enjoyed the song a lot. Nice write, good production and singing - the harmony is really nice.

Some small nits: The vocals seemed a bit overwhelmed by the instruments at time, and the fade was a bit abrupt.

You've got a number of lines that feel forced:

I lean against the door frame on my tears I choke.
No longer a two step glides cross the floor.
Banter and laughter now seem so surreal
No sign of a large crowd whose Sunday best wore

But that's a personal preference, so... not really a big deal.

Well done! Thanks for posting.


Thanks David.
You always give me plenty to think about.
Rob.

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