The lyric crafting and melody work are great. Good job on the writing. Some off the wall stuff that sounds pretty cool actually.



As I hear this....I hear vocals, piano, and drums. not much of anything else.

The drums are throwing a weird sense of timing into this. Floyd called them overblown.... I'd call them distracting. Look for a more "stable" sounding drum track and replace that distracting one with something that keeps the time and stays in the background. Perhaps even a brushes based track. The focus should be the vocals and the piano.

It kind of in a distant way, reminds me of Billy Joel's Piano Man. Listen to that song and then remix this one in a similar manner.

Your OP says there are string, bass and guitar in it. If so, they need to be turned up considerably and put into the mix in a balanced way.

Last edited by Guitarhacker; 06/03/15 04:57 AM.
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