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[She Ain't Never Coming Back]

My friend Bob Pickens, a great guy from Athens, Georgia, and I wrote this song about 8 years ago. I recently redid it in BIAB and it sounds so much better. I wrote the lyric and Bob and I worked on the music together. It has kind of a Country-Folk-Rock sound. Thanks in advance for the listens and any comments you might choose to leave.

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She Ain’t Never Coming Back
© 2008 Alan D. David, BMI / Robert Pickens

The taillights on that Chevy disappeared from sight
As it pulled out of the driveway just before sunlight
She had lived next door to him for all his seven years
Waving through the morning mist he couldn’t stop the tears

Her daddy got new job up in Hackensack
He knew it was their last goodbye
She won’t be coming back
No she won’t be back
She won’t be coming back
She ain’t never coming back

Then he met Diana his first year in high school
She was the cutest girl in class, she was way too cool
She was his steady girlfriend till that new boy came to town
When she gave him back his ring silence was the only sound

When she walked away from him he knew it for a fact
He knew it was their last goodbye
She won’t be coming back
No she won’t be back
She won’t be coming back
She ain’t never coming back

As he walked her down the aisle he beamed a father’s pride
From pre-school on to college and now she was a bride
But deep inside he felt just like that seven-year-old boy
As he gave away his only one, his lovely pride and joy

Everything in life we love isn’t promised us forever
It may be gone tomorrow, perhaps returning never.

As she lay there on the bed she tried to speak to him
He could barely understand the words, her voice was weak and thin
She said I’ll wait on the other side and then she closed her eyes
And when her hand slipped from his that’s when he realized

Her body lay there in the bed but Heaven’s where she’s at
She had said her last goodbye
She won’t be coming back
No she won’t be back
She won’t be coming back
She ain’t never coming back
No she won’t back
She won’t be coming back
No she won’t be back
She won’t be coming back
She ain’t never coming back

Alan

An interesting juxtaposition of a happy sounding backing with some serious and interesting lyrics. I liked it.
Also a pretty catchy chorus. Nice work.

Peter

Alan,

A very cool story song with a country feel - great vocal and mix as well.

Bob

First of all I love a song that tells a story, and your write here is a wonderful example of that. A sad ending, but that makes it more real.

Lots of great lines, a couple I really like:

"Everything in life we love isn’t promised us forever
It may be gone tomorrow, perhaps returning never"

and:

"Her body lay there in the bed but Heaven’s where she’s at
She had said her last goodbye
She won’t be coming back"

Really good song!

A classic Country write, Alan... a lot of sad in that!

I like how you used the banjo in the production. Enjoy hearing you sing these...

fj

Yes very sad lyric Vocal was excellent Love the way you can switch genres with such ease . Like being fluent in different languages . Well done

Peter,

Thanks a bunch. I tried several more somber backing tracks and they all made it sound like a dirj. I was messing around on my acoustic 6-string looking for a new approach and this beat sounded pretty good, so I grabbed this style in BIAB and filled it out. Glad you liked it. Thanks!

Alan & Di

HI Bob,

Always great to hear from you. I wasn't sure whether to call it Country, Folk or Rock, so I guess it's a little of all that. Glad you liked the song. Thanks again!

ALan & Di

HI Dave. Great to hear from you. Thanks for the listen.

I tend to like "life-progression" lyrics and I thought this one qualified pretty good. Glad you agree!

This was one of the easier lyrics for me to write., It all fell in place pretty good within the first couple of hours. I massaged it off and on for a day or two and this is where it ended up. The melody was a bit more of a challenge. Bob and I played around witrh that for a couple of weeks. The original was just Bob singing with an acoustic. Decided to flush it out and this is what we got.

Thanks again ... glad you enjoyed those lines.

Alan & Di (And Bob)

Hi Floyd,

Yeah, it is kind of sad. But, unfortunately, some folks have a life that's more dominated by sadness than joy. And some of us just choose to dwell on the bad rather than the good.

The banjo was a late addition I originally had just the mandolin and 12-string electric for the rhythm tracks. But I tried the banjo on a whim and it sounded pretty good, so I kept it.

Thanks for the feedback. Glad you enjoyed it!

Alan & Di (And Bob)

Hi Scott,

Thanks for the visit, listen and feedback ... much appreciated.

Funny you commented that switching genres is a lot like being fluent in different languages. In addition to English, I also speak fairly good German, French and Spanish. (Lived in germany 12 years). I've found that music, languages and math all have one very important thing in common ... they have a rather specific syntax. Once you learn that syntax, the rest falls into place much easier.

Thanks again for the listen and wonderful comments. Sure do appreciate it!

Alan & Di (Bob, too)

What a tune, Al-David! You consistently bring that great sounding old school country - I particularly like how it tells like a story. Gives a very interesting vibe, on top of having interesting lyrics. Thanks for sharing!

Nice well-written song Al!! I really like the way you worked the title into the different life experiences-crafty writing! Enjoyed this! Take care. Greg

Hi Deryk,

Great to hear from you. Glad you enjoyed it., And thanks for the very nice comments. Wishing you and the entire PG Music team the very best.

Alan

Greg,

You are too kind. But I like it! This one pretty much wrote itself, as far as the lyric is concerned. Everything pretty much fell into place. Thanks for the listen and kind comments.

Alan & Di (Bob, too)

Alan, good write and a very good vocal. The banjo is perfect and the arrangement is spot on. A very enjoyable listen. Tom

Hi Tom,

Thanks a bunch for those words of encouragement and kindness. I appreciate them very much. Best to you,

Alan & Di (Bob, too)

man, that banjo shines on this!

nice writing, catchy

nice vocals, just a cool song Al

Kenny

Hi Kenny ...

And that's a pretty cool review! Thank you very much. Glad it works for you. Thanks for the kindness and encouragement. Best to you.

Alan & Di (Bob, too)

floyd said "a lot of sad in that. " He's right - there is, and for us old school country fans (and bluegrass) sad songs were once the staple of the set list. We performed many sad songs for many years in our bluegrass bands. What many folks don't realize is that they are not easy to write w/o becoming overly maudlin. Songs by the Stanley Brothers come to mind in particular as examples of great sad songs. And Bill Monroe was the master of what he called "true life" songs. Your tune is right square in this wheelhouse. Sad things happen, hope springs eternal and you well expressed those sentiments with the write and heartfelt vocal.

Interestingly the arrangement captures the feel of both older and more modern country. Something a fellow forum member has called Appalachian Honky Tonk with the addition of the banjo.

Well done Mr David!

J&B