Plano.....
Since you said it's a 'rough draft' smile here's my take after 2x listening.

1) No....solo is not too simple. I wouldn't overthink that.
2) Drives along very well (as in ZZTop/Foreigner) and good delivery/performance of your vocal....it works.
3) I like the 'cyberspace' premise/concept.
4) Losing that unnecessary verse....that was a good cull.
5) Hmmmm....the into is 14 measures and about 30 seconds long. I know the song is only 02:40 but if I were asked and my opinion had any merit I think it would sound better with a 4 measures intro. Those 30 seconds can be made up by repeating a verse/playing the chorus one more time/vocal repeats during end vamp.

This is a well done rocker, a dance tune to get people on the floor doing good for bar. smile
There's nothing wrong with it as is....enjoyable listen.

These are just my opinions, I do not expect you agree or implement my thoughts.
It's a good cut and YOU are the only one that needs to be pleased with the end result.

Back to it....

Last edited by chulaivet1966; 02/24/19 01:23 PM.
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