Thank you Danny for your comments. You got me . . .
You know . . . there is actually an "As" on my rough draft but when I recorded the vocal the "as a" seemed too busy to begin the song. Although I often give my lyrics a half beat push. So I dropped the "as" - pardon a bad joke but I guess you could say I created an "As"-hole. And you sensed something was incomplete - it is a well-used phrase.
But I'll review my decision. Seriously.
I'm flattered to think that the melody might be palatable enough to hum along to.

Cheers - Ian


Ian
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