Much to admire here, in no particular order:
- the overall energy
- Some nice rhymes in there
- The gtr only section at 2:15 introduces a nice contrast at just the right time
- The lack of pauses between the sections maintains the tension.
- the mirroring of the ‘everybody's out to get you…’ lines – to me this is really the strong point of this recording.
Not sure if it is the vocal processing chain you’re using or an accent thing but I’m really hearing ‘fare’ and not fear.
There’s perhaps an overuse of the harm voices – I’d have preferred at least first part of verse section with just the mel voice, so that a 2nd voice line (or even 2tracking) introduces a contrast
Finally Floyd you get my critic’s award for coming in at less than 3:00 – a lesson to us all!

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