Love the tangled knot line. Tano, I agree with Noel and David.

But I'm going to add that it seems to me you are trying to write something more heart wrenching like "Neither One Of Us Wants To Be The First To Say Goodbye" - (Gladys Knight & The Pips).

Be careful about focusing on and adding too many cute and clever rhymes to your song lyrics. It can dilute the emotional punch.