I like it. as others have mentioned, the title is good. While I do like the lyrics and the way you wrote them I still don't know what the song is about.

The first part of V1 is kind of dark and foreboding then the last line about feet not touching the floor is really confusing me.

Who is gone? Where did they go? Why did they go? Are they coming back? And some other unanswered questions exist for this tune. Inquiring minds want to know.

Just some things to think about on the next tune you write.


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