Originally Posted By: Pat Marr
Hi Rog!

I like the brief delay at the end of each verse before you sing the last word. It builds tension slightly before the payoff which in turn makes the conclusion of the verse more satisfying to my ear.

I also really liked the parallel between all the things the main character forgets as opposed to the one thing he can never forget. Well done.

Two verses in a row start with the phrase "I can't forget your...", and that might be more powerful if you found an alternative phrase for one of them.

I like your unique voice too.... its perfect for this song!

Good mix of RTs and your own playing... the combination is mutually enhancing.

Anyway, I just woke up and my brain is having a hard time finding words, so I'll stop there. I thought it was a very impressive one hour production! I'd be happy to come up with something as interesting after a week or more!


Hi Pat. I'm always pleased to see your name on the list. Working so fast on this one, I hadn't realised I'd used that phrase twice, or I'd have done as you suggested. Glad you noticed the little delay at the end of the lines - it started out as just a place to breathe, but then it became a feature. Many thanks for the positive comments.

ROG.

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