Hi Rich,

As Floyd said, you really do have a way with your lyrics to make interesting and thought provoking observations with a humorous spin.

I thought the following lines were great:

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God bless the mushy cabbage thats floating in my dish

ha ha .. typical little boy attempt to put a positive spin on a distasteful situation

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God bless Mum and Dad well Mum any-way

another classic little boy trait: first, say what people expect you to say... then revise it into what you really think...


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God bless all the many things that leave me black and blue

proof of a kid whose parents tried to arm him with an attitude that can see usefulness in tribulation...

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God bless Betty Robinson who teaches me in school
Won't let me write with my left hand she's a god damn fool
Ate her apples yester-day Dad gave me a whoppin
Just like him and her on the inside they were rotten

VERY interesting metaphor, and you got the idea across in just a few words!

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God bless all the older kids who won't let me play
And the stupid mongrels that beat me up each day
There'll come a time things will change there'll be a tale to tell
With bitten tongues and bleeding gums I'll see them all in hell

again, typical of a little boy to start with the expected blessing for those who abuse him, then follow up with what he really thinks

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God bless every-body God bless every-thing
God bless all the uni-verse and all the stars that sing
May God bless all cre-ation and bless himself with joy
God Bless me too cause I'm off to sleep and I'm just a little boy

I'm glad you included this bit of key information because without identifying the fact that the singer is a little boy, much of the meaning you crafted into the lyrics would be lost or at least, not as easily understood

All the song writers on the forum have their own unique strengths... I think your strength lies in your ability to write lyrics that tell an interesting, profound and amusing story. Good job!



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