I like the music and the beat/groove.

I have a hard time making the title fit the rest of the lyrics. She burns my eyes.. that sounds like a bad thing...... then you say She's so beautiful..... the phrases don't agree and my mind can't make the connection. Just how I heard it on first listen. And first listen is critical to most listeners.

The vox treatment.... layered thick and with harmony is out of character with the island feel of the groove.... it's more at home with a southern gospel group of 4 guys singing 4 part harmony on a gospel song.

The dichotomy between those things kinda have me feeling ambivalent on this. The music rocks.... excellent job on that. Simplify the vocal to a single track and rework the lyrics slightly and this would be out freaking standing.

Last edited by Guitarhacker; 11/02/15 10:21 AM.
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