I like this song. The chord progression is unique. It reminded me how songs used to be written.

My only nit with this is the treatment you chose for the vocals. Sounds like a phase shifter or maybe a doubler that's too high, on the vocals. I'd rather hear a more natural voice with just some verb.... that would be more intimate. You have a good voice, no need to hide behind FX.

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Add nothing that adds nothing to the music.
You can make excuses or you can make progress but not both.

The magic you are looking for is in the work you are avoiding.