Robert,

why would the forum poet neglect to post his poetry? True, the lyrics are posted on Sound cloud but why not on the forum too? Just sayin'

This one really captures the feel of 60s folk anthems. I like the way the baritone electric guitar RT works in the context of the song.

Your song paints an interesting picture of two people who are both unhappy in the relationship for different reasons, but neither of them is willing to initiate a break. Sad and probably way too common a tale, one I'm sure will resonate with quite a few in your target audience.