Hans,
Fabulous song - thematically as well as musically.
I do think you need to work on the vocal track - it's gets very loud in spots and drowns out the backing. I think there may be some proximity effect form your microphone as well.
The level of reverb or delay on the voice is a bit over the top as well.
Easy things to fix.
The song remains fabulous regardless of those nits.


Cheers
rayc
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