"There seems to be some clash underneath the end of this line "And I turn and walk away" "

Ok, so it's not just me. Good to know. I've heard it, too and wondered if I should get rid of it. I will.

I tried singing "There're ghosts around this town". But just sounded square.

The other thing is, with this latest version I tried harder to enunciate more, and I think it lost some flow.

" "There's a room were she is holding me" struck me as suggesting restraint/kidnapping and took my mind away from the narrative. "

Now that's funny! Never crossed my mind someone might hear it that way.

Thanks for the feedback, I will put it to good use.


Last edited by Phil Leith; 01/12/19 06:53 AM.
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