Hey PlanoB.....(I'm old too...turning 72 very shortly)

Personally, I'm not 'offended' by anyone, any words or anything.

So....people can write any lyric they choose.
Although, I would add that one should anticipate and accept the likelihood that there will be someone who will chime in with the typical "I'm offended" for whatever reasoning and create internet drama for you.
I wouldn't want that so I am quite particular about my lyric writing.

I agree with Mike Head....that verse is not necessary and that imagery will likely ruffle someone's feathers.

But....as Blind Faith says "Do What You Like"...and accept what comes from the listeners.

That's my take....carry on.






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