I liked the melody of this song.

I found the vocals very hard to understand. The FX used ..... well, that made things worse in my opinion. It's often better to run a straight up vocal with some reverb than to try to make it sound "better" with off the wall FX. If Tom Waits can sing a song... anyone can. Well, almost anyone. I'd redo the vox track w/o the FX. If you need pitch correction, use it, but leave off the chorus and flanging and whatever else is on the vox track.

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