Bob,
1st off - cool melody and nice tense sadness/reflection after the upbeat intro.
Personally I'd cut the intro, (or at least the percussion at the very start), lots of variation and interesting stuff happening BUT I'm hooked on that fisrt pensive section. I wanted that to repeat as I was listening to the newer sections.
Caught me!


Cheers
rayc
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