Hi TuneMonger,

Well you got me smiling with this one I absolutely love it. Great melody and a great feel makes this such a pleasure to listen to.
This would make a great song pitch. you need to get it out there.

I'm not sure about the 'romantic queries' line. It may be funny but it's the only line in the song that's not a smooth rhyme and because of that sounds a little off to me.
You did set yourself a difficult job anyway trying to rhyme 'carries'. Maybe 'adversaries' would sing better.

I would have liked the chorus to lift a little more out of the verses to make it more 'hookey'. The harmonies are great but maybe a slightly heavier or busier backing would just lift it a little more. It's such a good chorus and deserves to stand out.

But that's all personal opinion. Overall, I absolutely love it and actually can't wait to play it to my good lady when she gets home.

Great job. Good luck with it.

Martin

Music is what feelings sound like.