Todd,

First thing that "hit me" is the harmonica. The playing is fine. There is a bit of "harshness" to it - maybe a bit too much high EQ? and seems loud compared to the vocal (maybe 3 dB?). That seems the case each time it comes back...

The prosody of "...my hands are caked and stained" is a bit bumpy. (You could drop the word "are" to avoid that).

The rest of the production sounds really good. Cohesive. A very "smooth" sound.

Love your vocal. Sits in the mix perfectly. Strong, with "warmth".

Cool song. The process is really intriguing. It would be cool to see the poem that it originated from (just for curiosity's sake).

There is a Neil Young-ish-ness to much of this (but "better").

I like it. A lot.

fj

150+ Songs produced using BIAB RealTracks
And 50 more...
and some more...