Welcome to the forum.

I love this song. Really good write and the recording is good.

One thing I noticed was that the BGV singers are too loud. I'd back them down a few dB. They are actually more upfront than your lead vocals which, BTW, could come up a few dB to set better in the mix. See what others think when they comment. I'm listening on good quality ear buds. So it might be different on speakers.

But man, what a great first song on the forum. What a way to say hello.

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