Hello PG music friends. My songs are not homeless anymore. I have transferred my current projects to my new system (macbook with PT-11). I tried to burn an audio CD and had a CPU issue, so this is a post from my work (sleeping on the couch between homes) CD. On my new system, the mixes are much clearer but my songs are now locked inside their new home with no current means of escape for public scrutiny. At any rate, this song represents my best Michael Franks feel. He was one of my main heroes for many years. If my last post (Heartbreak Blues) was Dr. Jeckyl (sp?) on steroids, this is Mr. Hyde on Valium. The main mix changes I have in mind are some cutting of the high frequencies, and possibly some mellow strings in parts. I will post the tracks used soon. Comments welcome (even encouraged!). Take care all. Greg


https://soundcloud.com/gjohnson-2/paradise


Destination:paradise

Destination:paradise
Giving in, I close my eyes
Imagine you beneath the skies
Of endless summer sun

I can feel you next to me
We lie beside the turquoise sea
The ocean plays its symphony
My dream has just begun

I taste your kiss, your touch I feel
The distance great but love so real
Our spirits connect until
I find my way back home

Destination: fantasy
We lie beneath the banyan tree
Nothin’ ‘round, just you and me
The world just slips away

Melting underneath your touch
Didn’t know that I could feel so much
Emotion, but your love is such
It carries me away

Wrapped in love, I feel so small
A butterfly in a waterfall
I’ll spread my wings and take it all
And never even try to fly away

Destination: rendezvous
Soon I will be home with you
A celebration, just us two
Beneath the summer sun

Destination:paradise
I could drown within your eyes
Stay submerged and never rise
Two spirits become one

Greg,

Love those lyrics and the melody.

My goodness, talk about romantic imagery. Doesn't get any better than "Wrapped in love, I feel so small A butterfly in a waterfall I’ll spread my wings and take it all And never even try to fly away"

Looking forward to your final arrangement since you said you're not finished with it yet. Also congrats on the new Mac DAW home!

Love the song. A+

Josie

HI Greg ... This such a pretty song! We hung on to every word as it played. nice lyric to compliment the music. It really wis a very pretty song ... nicely done!

I (Alan) fully agree with cutting some of the high EQ. I would probably leave the flute (nice touch, BTW!) as is as the tone is mellow but crystal clear. Your vocal is where we most noted the strength high EQ's. It caught you inhaling a couple of times and really popped the "S" and "P" sounds. So, I think you're on the right track there.

Also, as you approach the end, there is nothing but silence between 4:30 and 5:22, then about 45 seconds more music. Not sure if that was intended, an oversight or something you're aware of but can;t fix at the moment. Just thought I would mention it.

We enjoyed the song very much. Kudos an a great song! best to ya ...

Alan & Di

Hi Greg,

We think this is one of your best songs. Although we are not really jazz lovers, we do like this one. It's got a nice atmosphere to it and we really like your vocals here (they sound pretty enhanced, heavily compressed?).
We agree with Al, that the end of the song should be at about 4.30?
Anyway, very nice work.

Regards,
Rob and Anne-Marie

Very smooth and mellow. Your vocal is a very comfortable fit for this genre. All the nits I would have mentioned have been mentioned in others postings and you've stated this is not final.

Good job and enjoyable listen. Keep em coming.


Charlie

Hi Greg,

beautiful lyrics and chords. I'm curious how it's going to develop.
Nice flute. Enjoyable listen.

Guenter

Greg,

A beautiful, beautiful song. Both lyric and melody.

Quite Michael Frank-ish. And a little Steven Bishop? Maybe a touch of Robbie Dupree mixed in? a great sound - wherever it comes from... you do it as well as any of them...

Listened a number of times. Such a pleasure to listen to. I don't think you need to do anything other than to "tame" the vocal a bit. It has great presence, but is just "too hot". Besides pulling out some hi-EQ, some volume slopes on the breaths - not to completely eliminate them (that would likely be "obvious"), but sort of a volume fade in so you catch a bit of the breath before the next word. (Do you use a pop screen?)

Oh... and... nice instrumentation and mix, too. There's just so much to like about this... I would buy the album.

floyd

Greg,

All's been said.
What a beautiful song.

Mr Hyde is certainly chilled in this song!!

Alyn

Wow, How beautiful is this! Well written and expertly delivered. I am a huge fan of your vocals. There is a fine line between capturing the intimacy of a vocal and reducing some of the breaths and even a swallow in the beginning. I have used Nectar breath control on a few of Janice's quieter passages. It does a fine job of removing some of the extraneous noise while still retaining the quiet character of the vocal. A fine song from a great singer/writer. Tom

Zzzzmoooothh...

This should not be on Page 2 already.
Needs to be heard!

Josie, thanks so much for the support and kind words. You always make my day better with your comments!

Rob and Anne Marie, thanks so much. Really appreciate your feedback. You guys are a well of energy and creativity. Keep it up!

Charlie, thanks for your generous comments. They mean a lot to me. Really loved your most recent post!

Take care all, Greg

Guenter, thanks for you support and kind words. Always appreciated!!


Floyd, thanks for the generous comments. Always appreciate your wealth of knowledge and positive input. And, thanks for trying to give me another ride through the cycle. No bites. It doesn't seem that people don't like the song per se but just aren't interested in listening for some reason (few plays on Soundcloud). But definitely appreciate your effort and support.

Alyn, thanks for your encouraging words. Always enjoy what you do, and put a lot of value in your opinion!

Take care all. Greg

Icelander, thanks for your kind words. You have been a very positive new presence on the forum.

Tom, as always, your comments are beyond kind. I always love to hear from you and listen to your songs as you post them. I was about to shoot you a message as I noticed your absence. Welcome back, and I loved your new rocker! If you get a chance, listen to my remake of Heartbreak Blues (quite a different mix) and let me know if it too over the top. You can just send a backdoor message-don't want to be shamelessly self-promoting. Take care. Greg

Hi Greg,

This is beautiful. I love the feel and the flow of the music and the lyrics. Added to these, the melody and harmony are outstanding.

All the best,
Noel

Cool island feel....

Is that you in the beginning on guitar or a RT?

I like this.

Greg,

This is really nice! Your voice really fits the bill on this one (Floyd has a good tip there). I think this is my favorite that I have heard from you. Thanks for sharing it!

Steve

Nice song!

The introduction had me wondering - it seemed a tad slow, and a bit noisy. The guitar seemed a bit lonely by itself, and there's some rustling sound at 0:24-0:26.

But once the vocals and other instruments came in, it clicked together.

As others have said, it's a nice song - well sung an very evocative!

I hope PG Music gets some more flute tracks - it's amazing how much you an tweak the tempo of some of these instruments, and you selected some tasty bits. But I think it's been sadly overlooked in the RealTracks.

I found the "hidden" bonus track at 6:33!

Thanks for posting!

I have?? After messing up a bit with my last 'showcase' contribution, I honestly was starting to doubt if I fit in here or should be looking elsewhere for a 'home' So thanks right back for that very well timed compliment.

Greg

I started listening to the song before I commenced reading your comments. My immediate thoughts were: "Wow, is this Michael Franks II"? Then as I listened I read your words.

Absolutely sensational. If that's what you thought you might achieve, then I can tell you, you nailed it - in one.

This even exceeds your usual high-standards. Your best yet. Congratulations, (and more please).

When's the album going to be released?

Best
Trev

PS: Yes, there might be a small issue with the mix, there is a tag at the end after a long pause - I'm sure it's accidental