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#280063 - 01/15/15 04:23 AM [User Showcase] Daisy's World
Registered: 12/30/14
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HopelessRomantic Offline
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Registered: 12/30/14
Posts: 13
Loc: China
My first BIAB post.

https://soundcloud.com/trevorj800/daisys-world

Made with _UKBIGRK.STY HardRok w Crisp&FuzzGui

No other instrumentation.


Daisy's making her appearance at the debutante ball tonight
Wearing scarcely a yard of the finest Versace and oh, it fits so tight
Biff Balboa’s on her left side, on the other is her soldier boy
See the envy on all of the little boys’ faces as their wildest dream is destroyed

No, I do not want to be a part of Daisy’s world

Daisy is headed off to Dillcrest Station now that Woofy’s had her steak tartare
Daddy’s secretary’s typing all her college applications so there’s time for her to shop at Charivar
She’s a girl on a mission to accessorize, you know there’s only one senior prom
Guess who will be the queen with the big brown eyes and the world inside her palm?

No I do not want to be a part of Daisy’s world

Daisy has got her boyfriend, she keeps his picture in a locket by her heart
She keeps her exes in a freezer in the basement so they never have to be apart
She’s such a tawdry little flirt, yes I know that I should stop it
Cause I’ll prob’ly never even get a kiss
But the pain is so excruciatingly delicious that a boy can hardly resist

No I do not want to be a part of Daisy’s world


Edited by HopelessRomantic (01/15/15 04:34 AM)

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#280064 - 01/15/15 04:35 AM [User Showcase] Re: Daisy's World [Re: HopelessRomantic]
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Trevor,

Welcome to the forum!

An excellent write! "She’s a girl on a mission to accessorize.."

The opening is terrific. Sounds like you've been doing this for quite a while...Solid mix. I thought the drums could come up just a touch (but I generally tell everyone that...)

Very Bowie-ish...the background vocal is nice touch..

Very enjoyable... really looking forward to hearing more...

floyd
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#280074 - 01/15/15 05:07 AM [User Showcase] Re: Daisy's World [Re: floyd jane]
Registered: 12/30/14
Posts: 13
Loc: China
HopelessRomantic Offline
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Registered: 12/30/14
Posts: 13
Loc: China
Hi Floyd,

Thanks for compliments, though I can't take much credit for the mix. I just rendered the BIAB file in stereo and sang over it.

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#280102 - 01/15/15 08:34 AM [User Showcase] Re: Daisy's World [Re: HopelessRomantic]
Registered: 06/22/12
Posts: 2868
Loc: Karlsruhe, Germany
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Hi Trevor,

welcome to the forum!
Like Floyd said "very Bowie-ish".
Nice first post.

Guenter
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#280106 - 01/15/15 08:56 AM [User Showcase] Re: Daisy's World [Re: HopelessRomantic]
Registered: 12/21/13
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Loc: Davis, CA
Greg Johnson Offline
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Really fun and clever song!! Very well put together musically and lyrically. I think a short bridge or instrumental break would be good at some point in the song. Great stuff!! Take care. Greg

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#280134 - 01/15/15 12:51 PM [User Showcase] Re: Daisy's World [Re: HopelessRomantic]
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First welcome to the forum!

Second this is fantastic.

I love that " She’s such a tawdry little flirt" line.

Great write, mix and vocal.
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#280136 - 01/15/15 01:01 PM [User Showcase] Re: Daisy's World [Re: Greg Johnson]
Registered: 11/15/14
Posts: 306
Loc: Belgium
FredM Offline
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Registered: 11/15/14
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Loc: Belgium
Originally Posted By: Greg Johnson
Really fun and clever song!! Very well put together musically and lyrically. I think a short bridge or instrumental break would be good at some point in the song. Great stuff!! Take care. Greg

+1 from me
Trevor,
Welcome on the forum.
This is a nice opener. Though I like listening to the various styles on the forum it's nice to have an extra rocker on the scene, hope to hear more from you,
Grtz,
Fred

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