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#315568 - 10/23/15 11:22 PM
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Crystal Heart
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Hi. Redone this one from 50/90. https://soundcloud.com/tuigorge/crystal-heartStyle - SIMPORK4 - orchestral Drums - Rock ev 16 Violin - RT 2338 Hope you enjoy it. All comments welcome. Cheers. Crystal Heart Opal clouds em-brace the stars Bursting flowers shattered vase Clouds of mystery cloak the sun-rise Unicorns be-fore my eyes If you're not with me I'm not here Savage shadows feed cold fear Re-flected rainbows need you near Forever Crystal Heart clear and shining Crystal Heart never blue Crystal Heart warm and wondring Longing just for you Lovers laugh and fly like doves Cold steel hides in velvet gloves Shall we join the celebration Shiny shoes and pink carnation If you're not with me I'm not here Savage shadows feed cold fear Re-flected rainbows need you near For--ever Crystal Heart clear and shining Crystal Heart never blue Crystal Heart warm and wondring Longing just for you Longing just for you
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#315587 - 10/24/15 06:34 AM
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Re: Crystal Heart
[Re: RichMac]
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My 50/90 effort fizzled out after the first moth or so, did you keep going? Since I missed this one the first time around, I thought I should give a listen. Nice music and interesting storyline -- I enjoyed my morning listen.
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#315589 - 10/24/15 06:46 AM
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Re: Crystal Heart
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Hi Rich,
and again you're painting interesting pictures with your words. Nice arrangement. I enjoyed my listen.
Guenter
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#315593 - 10/24/15 08:40 AM
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Re: Crystal Heart
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Rich, I read the words first, you are a poet putting his words to music.
Great stuff Rich
Alyn
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#315594 - 10/24/15 08:46 AM
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Re: Crystal Heart
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Hi Rich, You write some very interesting lyrics. I agree with Guenter and Alyn. I enjoyed your song. Sonny
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#315612 - 10/24/15 10:28 AM
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Re: Crystal Heart
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Nice chords line and lyrics you created. I like your song.
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#315619 - 10/24/15 11:47 AM
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Re: Crystal Heart
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I agree with everything that has been said thus far, especially Alyn's poet putting music to his poetry comment.
Very nice!
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#315633 - 10/24/15 01:42 PM
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Re: Crystal Heart
[Re: Kemmrich]
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Hi Kevin. Thanks for the listen and comments. I battled on to the end of 50/90 using Graheme Cochran's advice. I think it was him. Don't try to write really good songs, just write songs. Hopefully they will improve with time, rewrites and tweaking. I have a hell of a lot of tweaking to do! Cheers.
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#315639 - 10/24/15 02:07 PM
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Re: Crystal Heart
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Richard,
I like the sound of this. A fairly big sounding production from a very small number of instruments.
Not sure what the lyric is trying to convey - but some cool word combinations.
floyd
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#315660 - 10/24/15 07:13 PM
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Re: Crystal Heart
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Nice job RichMac!! You are certainly one of the most creative and colorful lyricists on the forum. Arrangement is very different but I really like it. A pleasure to listen to! Take care. Greg
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#315678 - 10/24/15 09:30 PM
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Re: Crystal Heart
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Hi Richard,
There are terrific phrases in the lyrics... very inspired, indeed. Things like... "clouds of mystery cloak the sunrise" .... "savage shadows" ... "cold steel hides in velvet gloves", etc. These are such fantastic images. I'm not quite sure how they relate to the whole but it's very inventive writing.
If ever you revisit this, I would try singing the lyrics against a swing style. To my ears, it sounded like you were singing in a swing 8-beat and the drums were playing an even 8-beat. I found myself wondering what it would sound like if vocal rhythm and drum rhythm matched.... I simply pass the thought on for what it's worth. Please feel completely free to ignore.
Overall... another inventive listen!
All the best, Noel
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#315689 - 10/25/15 02:09 AM
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Re: Crystal Heart
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Hi Guenter. Thanks for the comment about painting pictures. This one's about feelings. Cheers.
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#315730 - 10/25/15 01:56 PM
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Re: Crystal Heart
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Thanks Alyn. Not much of a poet i'm afraid but I enjoy jamming words together. Cheers.
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#315746 - 10/25/15 05:17 PM
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I enjoyed the song and getting lost in the lyrics. You are very innovative with your lyrics and music.
Charlie
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#315841 - 10/26/15 01:50 PM
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Re: Crystal Heart
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Thanks Sonny. I'm glad you enjoyed this. It's a bit new agey. Cheers.
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#315842 - 10/26/15 01:54 PM
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Re: Crystal Heart
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Hi Sergio. Thanks for liking the song. I'm actually quite pleased with it. Cheers.
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#315843 - 10/26/15 01:57 PM
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Re: Crystal Heart
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Hi Mario. Thanks for the nice comments. It's certainly fun to do something a bit abstract now and then. Cheers.
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#315846 - 10/26/15 02:10 PM
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Hi Rich,
Nice style! We're going to try that one. Good lyrics and melody.
Rob and Anne-Marie
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#315932 - 10/27/15 12:34 AM
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Re: Crystal Heart
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Hi Floyd. Well it's feelings rather than a story. A bit abstract. The verse and prechorus (if that's what it is) contemplate different aspects of a relationship. With some joy and some misgivings. The chorus reaffirms the purity and strength of the relationship. I sort of felt it being an interlude in a rock opera. The male lead singing the verse and prechorus and massive chorus and orchestra thundering the chorus. Crystal Heart is the female lead. That's about it. Thanks for having a listen and for making me consider what it was about. Cheers.
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#315959 - 10/27/15 06:28 AM
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Richard, You most certainly are a poet. Sometimes we have to look back at our creations to find deeper meanings. It's part of the magic of creative songwriting. This one has some very good lines in it. I enjoyed it. Tom
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