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#351935 - 05/30/16 05:14 AM
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The Thought Of Her
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It's Memorial Day. One thing to remember... the young men (and women) that we send off to fight our wars are just that... young. They think the things that all of us think when we are that age. Fate simply puts them in a place they should not be. A soldier's story. A co-write with Bill Osofsky. THE THOUGHT OF HER got an email from my sister said that shoppin' down at walmart she bumped into this girl she really likes as sweet as i could ask for when she heard that i'm off fighting she asked if it's okay for her to write well, that girl's become my fantasy i just pretend she's here with me in the solitude of night she takes me to a better place back to how things were and i think i'm falling in love with the thought of her. the guys thought i was crazy cause i acted like a school kid 'til that letter came on wednesday just 'fore noon finally got to see her she was pretty as a picture and she signed it hugs and kisses, see you soon. yeah,that girl's become my fantasy i just pretend she's here with me in the solitude of night she takes me to a better place back to how things were and i think i've fallen in love with the thought of her. yesterday my war was finally over i feel a peace that i have never known they put me on an airplane back to dover i'm comin' home lord, i'm comin' home and i'll always keep that fantasy she'll be with me eternally in the solitude of night now i'm in a better place free from how things were but i'll always be in love with the thought of her. i'll always be in love with the thought of her Peace.
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#351939 - 05/30/16 05:34 AM
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Wow Floyd... this is a great submission on Memorial Day weekend!
I think you did a great job of developing the psychology of young love, and the tendency at that age to fall in love with the thought of something more than with the reality of it. In fact, I'd say that tendency continues throughout life.
You are the master of saying interesting things through simple language.. I am truly amazed to watch how you navigate everyday speech patterns while avoiding all of the cliches that are so firmly embedded in that realm.
Its interesting too, the way you left the story somewhat unresolved, after building the audience's interest and providing enough information to make them feel invested in the outcome. I'm not sure if I like that or not... ;-)
But it doesn't really matter, because the important thing is that the lack of resolution impacted me. If I were a young person hearing this on the radio (or wherever young people hear music these days) I would probably want to keep hearing it, in hope that I could eventually wrap my brain around whatever mysterious ingredient was keeping me fascinated and captivated.
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#351948 - 05/30/16 06:00 AM
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Oh my, Memorial Day does bring out the bittersweet side of everything in the human experience. An excellent tale of love blossoming because of the situation we find ourselves in.
Heartbreaking lyrics and excellent performance. Great write, too.
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#351979 - 05/30/16 09:25 AM
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floyd, Pat, as usual, said what I was going to say but in a much better way! Great song and thought provoking lyrics Up to your usual extremely high standards  Alyn
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#352003 - 05/30/16 11:48 AM
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Very powerful. Fate should put this song where it should be... This one has Alan Jackson written all over it.
Great write, performance, arrangement and mix.
Excellent presentation for Memorial Day.
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#352006 - 05/30/16 12:07 PM
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WOW!! AWESOME!!! There are so many great elements in this song. The chorus melody is infectious-the emotion just drips from it. I could hear that done instrumentally as a film score for a powerful scene. The Walmart reference puts an unpretentious, regular guy element in there. The concept of falling in love with "the thought" of someone is something many young lovers go through. And, in this case, the singer needs something to hang on to in this extremely tough situation, and finds that, in a way, in his own mind/heart. This is a POWERFUL write! I LOVE IT!!! Great job Floyd and friend! Take care. Greg
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#352008 - 05/30/16 12:08 PM
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Forgot to say, there is a "Galveston" element in the situation. Floyd was pushing Jimmy Webb's mastery with this write! Those who have not heard Galveston should take a listen. Take care. Greg
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#352011 - 05/30/16 12:13 PM
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Congratulations,
It's a very nice song.
Do you use BIAB for several tracks ?
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#352028 - 05/30/16 01:19 PM
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Floyd
The song develops beautifully, I like how it unfolds.
Excellent melody and thoughtful lyrics.
Really nicely done.
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#352029 - 05/30/16 01:21 PM
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Hi Floyd,
just beautiful! Great story and excellent presentation.
Felt like home on your black page and enjoyed my listens a lot.
Guenter
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#352038 - 05/30/16 02:32 PM
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Hi Floyd,
As far as we're concerned, this is your best up to date!
Beautiful arrangement. top notch vocal and a perfect build up of the song.
Lyrics are very appropriate.
That accordion/harmonica works perfectly here.
Rob and Anne-Marie
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#352096 - 05/31/16 01:12 AM
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More genius from Floyd.
You have delivered again my friend. What a great song, what a great arrangement, what a perfect choice of absolutely everything.
Congratulations also to Bill.
You've collectively put a sombre and fitting tribute in place. Perfect timing.
Trevor
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#352098 - 05/31/16 02:02 AM
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Hi Floyd,
You know I have been a great admirer of your work ‘long before’ I even joined the forum
This song for me just confirmed that even more, shades of Glen Campbell and the man I consider to be one of the greatest lyricist of the past years, Jimmy Webb
PaddyG
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#352104 - 05/31/16 03:17 AM
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Floyd,
Outstanding track! The lyric and vocal is just great - really enjoyed this one.
Bob
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#352190 - 05/31/16 01:06 PM
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Hi Floyd
very exciting song.
Great production as usual.
Sergio
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#352279 - 06/01/16 05:48 AM
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Late on this one – fighting the flu. Particularly liked this line: “they put me on an airplane back to dover” Reminded me of "Taking Chance" - a great movie. http://www.imdb.com/title/tt1019454/Great tribute to our fallen heroes. Regards, Bob
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#352306 - 06/01/16 08:25 AM
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We listened to this early on Memorial Day after we had taken flowers to Janice's dad who
rests in a veteran's cemetery. I rarely get goose bumps from a song but, man, when
"they put me on an airplane back to dover" came across I broke out in them. All the images
over the years of Dover just came flooding in.
All of the signature fj touches are there with the vocal, write and production so no need
to detail them...we just need to say that is is poignant, moving and a write that
offers the Memorial Day tribute in a unique and powerful way.
Well done!!
J&B
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#352320 - 06/01/16 10:56 AM
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Wow - very well written and performed. I like this one a lot Floyd. Great song.
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#352325 - 06/01/16 12:11 PM
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Beautiful song Floyd. Well done
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#352561 - 06/03/16 06:28 AM
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Thanks to all who listened and commented. It is really appreciated.
I've written a bunch with Bill. His sense of prosody is some of the best I've seen - particularly for someone who has no musical (instrument - or singing, for that matter) skills at all (by his own admission). He also has a great sense of how to structure a song to truly "work" - which, again, is a rarity in a lyric-only guy - heck, that's rare among songwriters in general - one of the separators, really...
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