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#473321 - 05/18/18 02:52 AM
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Details below! Edit: Minor changes in the mix. The Writing on the WallAberdine's bound for Texas She packed her bags one morning And left without a forwarding address It's like she'd never even been here With nothin' round to keep her No one in town she's gonna miss Aberdine hopped a greyhound She's dreaming of tomorrow Leaving darker days far behind Already forgot me And the promises she made They somehow never crossed her mind CHORUS No, I don't blame her none Though she lied and she said she'd call When your heart believes It's hard to clearly read The writing on the wall The writing on the wall Aberdine's gone to texas I wake up in the morning And I just can't believe that she's gone I'll keep on pretending That phone is gonna ring And that she's finally comin' home Technical DetailsStrummed Guitars - Native Instruments, Strummed Acoustic 1 & 2 Bass - Electric, ModernCountrySync Ev16 100 Piano - Rhythm PopRootsyJohn Ev16 100 Drums - EZ Drummer, Vintage Rock Kit Strings - Garritan Personal Orchestra, Session Strings Vocal Processing - Waves Tune, Nectar Mastering - Ozone 7 Elements Effects - EZMix DAW - Reaper NotesThis song took a lot more work to finish that I expected. To be honest, I wasn't sure I'd ever get it done! In what seemed like a good idea at the time, I decided that it would be a good idea to upgrade my computer with parts assembled from Craigslist. Wrong size case, bad power supply, problems installing Windows, issues with the video card... Even today, when it's relatively stable, it still crashed on me three times while editing the mix. (Turning off one of the overclocking options in the BIOS might have fixed that problem). First world problems a-plenty.  Continuing my personal songwriting challange, this time time around I figured I should build a song from ground up using BiaB. I ended up with the PopRootsyJohn style, but ended up replacing just about every other BiaB track except for the piano and bass. I had a lot of tracks here - including a Korg M1 and Wavestation - but in the mixing stage, it was apparent that more is actually less. The mix is probably still too busy... feel free to comment on that, too, if that floats your boat.  One nice thing about the style is that the piano part is MIDI, so I was able edit various bits like the intro and the bridge and thicken the right hand voicing up a bit. I tried a bunch of pianos sounds, and ended up with the one from BiaB, doubled with an electric piano. I also got stuck in Rewrite Hell. After working out the backing tracks and a melody, I ended up writing three different songs before I got one I liked. Even then, I spent way too long finessing the lyrics. David Snyder I'm not. Singing is always a challenge. I envisioned the song sung an octave lower, but I'm really pitchy in that register, and some of the notes were too low for the pitch correction software to recognize!  Even when I set the melody in a decent register, it took several sessions before I was able to get usable vocals. My hat's off to you folk who make all this look so easy! With the recent discussion about "modern" vocals, I decided to have a go at it myself. There's a plethora of effects on the lead vocal, including a hard "auto tuned" version sitting under the lead, as well as an even quieter version of the lead pitched a whole octave down! And that's not even including what Nectar, EZ Mix, Ozone Elements and other plugins are doing. As usual, feedback of all sorts is appreciated.
Edited by dcuny (05/18/18 11:37 PM)
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#473328 - 05/18/18 04:25 AM
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Hi David.. I had to laugh reading your computer woes.... I am going through the same thing. I had a laptop with 500 gigs harddive and now they gave me one with only 250!! Then I order another 500 SSD drive and some extra memory at the time ..both wrong type etc.. etc.
I enjoyed the song very much David. I think we need to hear more from you!
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#473329 - 05/18/18 05:02 AM
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David,
the lyrics sound fine. They sound right. Reading them in isolation may have been problematic for you but in-sit u they work - they tell a story well.
The song rolls along really nicely. Your vocal sounds a little nasal but I don't know your work so don't know if that's you, a cold or the plugs.
Your vocal doesn't sound auto-tuned so you've obviously needed very little or know how to wrangle it really well.
Computers are cruelly addictive devices and, like all people & things that seek to inveigle themselves into our lives, they like to let us know how much we need them by throwing a shoe every now & then. I'm hamstrung by a machine running XP that works beautifully with my VSTs, isn't keen on the latest Reaper and won't run anything after BIAB 2011 BUT I'm able to do what I need so far - so, so good.
I enjoyed your song & your story.
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#473345 - 05/18/18 06:26 AM
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Really work here! Despite all your computer issues, this tune turned out fantastic. Your vocals are really strong here, especially the harmonies on the hook. I liked the lyrics a lot as well, personally. You should be proud of this one - thanks for sharing
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#473351 - 05/18/18 06:52 AM
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Excellent song, bouncy tune!!
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#473368 - 05/18/18 07:57 AM
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I enjoyed the song very much David. I think we need to hear more from you! Hi, Joanne. I'm glad you enjoyed it! Sorry to hear about your computer. When it's not crashing, this computer works a lot better than the prior one - faster processor, more memory, better video - so I can't really complain. It no longer gets super-sluggish when editing songs. I've been following your various posts, and I was really tempted to download Melodyne this round just to compare it against Waves Tune. But if I liked it, that would be another chunk of cash out the door, so I resisted... this time around. 
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#473369 - 05/18/18 08:11 AM
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the lyrics sound fine. They sound right. Reading them in isolation may have been problematic for you but in-sit u they work - they tell a story well. Hi, Ray. Sorry, I was unclear. I'm happy with how the lyrics turned out, but there were a host of large and small changes along the way. There's a time when the marginal value of making changes is so low that you call it finished, but I'm pretty poor at gauging that point. It also makes the song harder to sing, when the "old" lyric is still in my head, even though I've got the new lyric typed out in front of me to read...  Your vocal sounds a little nasal but I don't know your work so don't know if that's you, a cold or the plugs. It's me. I should have swept through the frequencies to and cut that honking tone. Thanks for reminding me! Your vocal doesn't sound auto-tuned so you've obviously needed very little or know how to wrangle it really well. I need a lot more than I'd like! One of the reasons I had to re-sing the song (several times) was that it couldn't be tuned. For example, vibrato has both pitch and volume. You can re-tune the frequency, but the change in volume will still be there. Similarly, a lot of vocal errors had timbre issues embedded in them. Live and learn. The next performances were a lot better. But I'm also getting a bit better at tuning. I enjoyed your song & your story. Thanks!
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#473370 - 05/18/18 08:13 AM
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For what it's worth, I couldn't hear the computer issues in your song Man, to me this seems like it could be a beatles song. So cool! I'm not sure if you've heard on them? This was a great start to my listening day on here. Thanks for sharing it.
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#473371 - 05/18/18 08:16 AM
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Yeah, a lot more work than I hoped it would be! Especially since most of the harmonies were accidental. I was going to add harmonies this time around, but was happy to hear that the vocals seemed to work OK without harmonies. Because that would have been morework! Thanks! I'm glad the song worked for you. I'm happy with how it turned out, but often - and this was no exception - it seems that up until the final mixdown, the song's just not going to gel. You can't really "fix it in the mix", but you can fix the offending things in the mix, in my case often by removing stuff that doesn't need to be there.
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#473372 - 05/18/18 08:16 AM
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Excellent song, bouncy tune!! Thanks, Clifton!
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#473419 - 05/18/18 11:42 AM
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Really, really like this!! I hear a lot of 60's British influence (which I love). Orchestration is simply excellent!! Exceptionally nice listen!! Take care. Greg
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#473422 - 05/18/18 11:52 AM
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Really good stuff and a very honest description of your labour on this song.
I think the time effort etc., shows through on the final production.
You should be proud of this one, a comment was made about the song sounding like the Beatles I definitely heard that as in the Ringo styled songs.
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#473438 - 05/18/18 01:42 PM
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Man, to me this seems like it could be a beatles song. So cool! I'm not sure if you've heard on them? Hehehe. You crack me up. Thanks for the nice words.
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#473444 - 05/18/18 02:07 PM
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Really, really like this!! I hear a lot of 60's British influence (which I love). Orchestration is simply excellent!! Exceptionally nice listen!! Thanks, Greg. I actually ran the strings through a vinyl plugin to hint at a Mellotron sound, although I doubt it came out that way. ...a comment was made about the song sounding like the Beatles I definitely heard that as in the Ringo styled songs. Hey, Ringo songs are fine with me! 
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#473445 - 05/18/18 02:11 PM
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Hey, Ringo songs are fine with me!
wasn't BEING FUNNY JUST HONEST !!!!
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#473449 - 05/18/18 02:28 PM
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Hi David,
Really enjoyed this tune a lot. Very quality writing and well produced.
There's a quiet, I think string part, that kinda sounds like vocals that plays thru much of the tune. My suggestion would be to remove it. I REALLY like all the strings in the last stanza and I like the louder, more arpeggiated string part, but I'm not sure that quieter, pad like part, adds much?
Anyway that's a small thing,
Very nice tune, production and writing
Peace,
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#473456 - 05/18/18 02:55 PM
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Hey, Ringo songs are fine with me!
wasn't BEING FUNNY JUST HONEST !!!! As am I. Any comparison to (just about) any Beatles song is a good thing, thanks!
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#473457 - 05/18/18 02:58 PM
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Any comparison to (just about) any Beatles song is a good thing, thanks!
Correct it was/is a big compliment.
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#473468 - 05/18/18 03:31 PM
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Really enjoyed this tune a lot. Very quality writing and well produced. Hi, Ian. Thanks for the kind words. There's a quiet, I think string part, that kinda sounds like vocals that plays thru much of the tune. My suggestion would be to remove it. Thanks so much for catching that - I'll correct that in the next mix. It's a vocal guide track should have been muted.
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#473487 - 05/18/18 05:45 PM
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Straight up reminded me of the seventies.This is well written and produced David. Enjoyed the story line.Rob
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